Really lovely poem momo. Never stop writing.
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tw: e*t*ng d*s*rd*rs, s*lf h*rm
i saw a little girl in church yesterday. she couldn't have been more than three years old, with blond curls and a red plaid dress. seeing her reminded me of myself. i used to have blond curls and i also wore red plaid dresses at christmas. i loved to imagine worlds of my own, creating characters with my wild imagination. my mind was my best friend; there was never a dull moment in it. i loved to dance and sing. i was a bossy kid, always wanting to tell my friends what to do. i loved playing with my siblings; wrestling on the couch, hide and seek and countless others. i loved food. cookies, brownies, pizza, meatloaf, nutella sandwiches, berries, apples, chips and goldfish were my best friends. i would cry for people i had never met. i loved my smooth, soft skin that tanned in the summer sun. i cared so much for people, even at such a young age. i was full of life, and loved living in our beautiful world.
i have straight brown hair now. i wear jeans and sweatshirts. my imagination is now full of horrors and nightmares. my mind is my worst enemy, feeding me poison. i dance and sing to feel my emotions. i am quiet now, letting others take the lead for fear of them disliking me and my ideas. my siblings have moved away, and i'm the last one left. i am scared of food, worrying about how it will change my weight and appearance. i still cry over people i've never met. my once smooth skin now bears thin scars, caused by myself. i still care so much for people, but no one cares for me. my zest for life has faded, and i sometimes wish i was dead so i wouldn't have to feel this pain anymore.
but i'm trying to heal that child inside of me. i let her eat cookies and cupcakes. i let look in the mirror and imagine herself as a queen. i let her dance for herself and her Lord. i let her cry. and most importantly:
i let her live.
Hey momonster! This is a special review as it will be the one that I claim my KotGR Unicorn with. Because it's such a special review I thought it'd be fitting to try to review your poem using @AmayaStatham's KotGR Review Template . So here we go.
MEOW! Hello, friend! My name is Ellie and today I will be reviewing using my very own Black Cat Review Method! It is very similar to the incredible YWS S'more Method but I have Halloween-ified it and made it spooky! My little black cat friend, Vladimir, wants to offer his opinion on your amazing literary piece:
Mystical Witch Hat - What I See, Observe, and Interpret
Momo, this was truly beautiful! When I read it, I knew that without a doubt, I needed to take the time to analyze it and leave you a review. I am going to assume that this is a person piece based off of your life, but if that interpretation is wrong, then assume that I am speaking about whoever this is based on instead of you. Letās get right into this piece and break this down, part by part.
I see two main sections in this. First, who you were before, and secondly, who you are now and who you have become as you got older.
i saw a little girl in church yesterday. she couldn't have been more than three years old, with blond curls and a red plaid dress. seeing her reminded me of myself. i used to have blond curls and i also wore red plaid dresses at christmas.
my mind was my best friend; there was never a dull moment in it. i loved to dance and sing. i was a bossy kid, always wanting to tell my friends what to do.
i loved food. cookies, brownies, pizza, meatloaf, nutella sandwiches, berries, apples, chips and goldfish were my best friends.
i have straight brown hair now. i wear jeans and sweatshirts. my imagination is now full of horrors and nightmares. my mind is my worst enemy, feeding me poison.
my siblings have moved away, and i'm the last one left. i am scared of food, worrying about how it will change my weight and appearance.
but i'm trying to heal that child inside of me. i let her eat cookies and cupcakes. i let look in the mirror and imagine herself as a queen. i let her dance for herself and her Lord. i let her cry. and most importantly:
i let her live.
i would cry for people i had never met.
i still cry over people i've never met. my once smooth skin now bears thin scars, caused by myself. i still care so much for people, but no one cares for me. my zest for life has faded, and i sometimes wish i was dead so i wouldn't have to feel this pain anymore.
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