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*some really poetic title*

by momonster


what we wear on our wrists says much about us

   

some wear bracelets, bearing the names

of those who have passed, the names

of those who mean much to us

or

patterns and designs that hold memories

of a trip taken long ago

of a gift given by a friend

    

some have tattoos

symbols that remind us of what we stand for

or

an impulsive decision made at a young age

     

some bear scars

a tale of their life told in tiny markings

or

a representation of a time of hardship

that one has overcome


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upinthearcher wrote a review...



Hey, (this is probably going to be extremely short)

I really liked this, it shows a really interesting point of view. I found it really fun that you described tattoos as an impulsive decision we made at a young age. But then it really touched me that you said scars were a representation of a time of hardship that one has overcome. I feel like more people should think that about them and I personally appreciate that you do.

I really liked it!




momonster says...


thank you for the review! i'm glad you liked the poem :)



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AkuRashomon wrote a review...



Hey there! This is Ina aka loveissourgrapes and I am back here to make a review or comment about your poem with *some really poetic title*. It's been awhile because I've been busy with school. Anyways, let's go!

First impressions. I wanted to read something nice and short, was excepting to read a romance poem but I ended up with this one. Not complaining though because it was a good one. The message of this is good too.

"what we wear on our wrists says much about us

some wear bracelets, bearing the names
of those who have passed, the names
of those who mean much to us
or
patterns and designs that hold memories
of a trip taken long ago
of a gift given by a friend"

I rarely wear something on my wrist but this is a nice one. It also tells us how other people differ because some wear bracelets, with their names on it, the names of loved one too, a pattern that holds memories or it was just given by someone important to that person. I see a lot of children outside wearing bracelets for all the reasons given in this stanza so I found it nice.

"some have tattoos
symbols that remind us of what we stand for
or
an impulsive decision made at a young age"

Yeah, I see people get tattoos because of their culture, someone or something they really love, memories, or any symbol that means a lot to anyone. I see a lot of people have tattoos with someone's face, a memory or a thing that they love so much on their skin. Usually I see people with tattoos on their arms, hands or backs.

"some bear scars
a tale of their life told in tiny markings
or
a representation of a time of hardship
that one has overcome"

This is my favorite stanza. Because I do have scars that remind me of the hardships I have overcame. Some people show me markings on their body saying they love having it because it reminds them of a favorite thing that happened to them or a big hardship they faced before.

There are just some things that we have on your bodies or even symbols that remind us about bad/good things. I am happy I got to remember that mark and the memory of that with this poem. Overall, it is good. Keep it up! Have a good day/night too. I just saw on your related items, you are a marvel, star wars and the avatar tv show because of your avatar hihi. Anyways, see you around c:




momonster says...


thank so much for the review! i'm so glad you liked this poem and related to it <3



AkuRashomon says...


You're welcome! ^^



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NadyaStatham wrote a review...



Hey there,

Here to leave you a review very quick.

First of all, I really like your title. Its the main reason I chose to read and review your poem. Its just so titley and so not. You did a great job bringing your message forward and it was a very nice and fun read. I feel like you wrote this poem based on expierences you have had. I do not know for sure. Of course. But, it just feels to real to be fake.

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what we wear on our wrists says much about us



some wear bracelets, bearing the names

of those who have passed, the names

of those who mean much to us

or

patterns and designs that hold memories

of a trip taken long ago

of a gift given by a friend
***

This first stanza already throws a lot at us. It talks about the wristbands, bracelets and all things we wear at our hands that hold memoiries of those who are dear to us or were very dear to us. Its just so roughly written. Which I like, that its not to much fleshed out. Its very nicely and i love your word choice over here.

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some have tattoos

symbols that remind us of what we stand for

or

an impulsive decision made at a young age



some bear scars

a tale of their life told in tiny markings

or

a representation of a time of hardship

that one has overcome

***

I love this stanza. Its not to long and short neither. The fact that you took your time to write, tiny, over there gives it more meaning and purpose. I really loved it. Its very hard to let go. Some people do not understand that. They are just telling you, yeah, the person is dead. You NEED to move on. No, we dont. We will move on when we are ready. You are not the one telling us who we should be and how to live our lives. That is totally not fair. Everyone has their own meaning and decision.

I am very happy you wrote this poem. It means a lot to the world and you did an amazing job. Keep writing. I am surely going to read more poems of you. You have a very nice writing style and you should definitly keep it up.

Have a nice day or night!

Amazingly yours,
Rinisha




momonster says...


thanks for the review!



NadyaStatham says...


it was my pleasure



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untrustingsemicolon wrote a review...



Hi, I just wanted to leave a quick review!
This poem was easy to follow despite having a deeper meaning and encouraging some rumination. I really like your first line, as it is straightforward by immediately starting with the allegory/main point, which additionally sets the scene for the poem and engages readers. I feel that all your stanzas carry many important meanings, but it would have been nice to see all your points lead to a deep conclusion, maybe even stepping out from behind the initial allegory and directly addressing the meaning behind the poem. This may have given your writing a more defined structure, flow and purpose, and I believe it would resonate more with readers if it was conclusive.

Overall, I still really liked this poem~
Good job! :D




momonster says...


thanks for the review!



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GengarIsBestBoy wrote a review...



Howdy Hey! Gengar here to leave a quick review!

I really liked the structure of this poem, with how you listed things out; I thought it flowed really well. Reading this made me imagine someone sitting on a bench in a busy area, observing the people that pass them up.

My only criticism is that the second and third stanzas aren't as developed as the first, and it doesn't feel as balanced.

Keep up the good work!
--GengarIsBestBoy




momonster says...


thanks for the review!




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