Hi Lim! It's been a long time since I read a fun, silly poem like this, so I just had to try my hand at reviewing it.
One of the things I really love about the formatting of this poem is how you used periods to make spaces between each stanza. It's the type of thing I did a lot when I first joined YWS, so it really brings back the nostalgia of earlier poetry. It adds another fun touch to this poem.
Another thing I love is how descriptive you are. You provided just the right amount of details. It was enough for me to imagine the furry little culprit, but also didn't stray into excessiveness. It kept your poem short and sweet.
I think my favorite stanza is the one down below:
I remember hearing
claws scrabbling
over smooth tiles.
When I read that stanza, I immediately imagined your dog frantically trying to rush out of the room before you noticed he was in there.
My one critique is more of a suggestion than a criticism. I think it would be fun if you showed some kind of keyboard shenanigans at the very beginning of the poem—like a keysmash or a mistyped word. It would make it seem like someone
I really enjoyed this poem! Let me know if there's anything I need to clarify in my review, and have a great day/night~
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