From over the mountains he came,
the writer who wanted a name,
he spilt all his beans,
found out what that means:
his stories all sounded the same.
~
There was a young writer with style,
who didn’t seek substance for miles –
they entered their room
and quickly assumed
their journals had insights in piles.
~
There was a young writer who swore
they'd sung an original score,
with love and with hate,
and drama a spate,
but it all had been done before.
~
There was a young writer who read
that cool stories end with 'a Z' –
they titled their tale,
which editors failed,
until they used 'S's instead.
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Good morning, afternoon, evening, night, or whatever applies to you in your specific time zone. Anyway, onto the review. I must say, I very much enjoyed reading your poem. It made me laugh, in particular the part about looking for a character’s name. It’s so hard to find a suitable name, I swear my characters are laughing at me.
Anyway, onto the reviewing part of the review. The only thing I noticed was that you had a consistent A’A’B’B’A rhyme scheme, but the last stanza threw that off slightly. The second line doesn’t really rhyme. “Read” and “zee” don’t rhyme, although “rēad” with a long ‘e’ sound, does rhyme but doesn’t fit in the grammar of the sentence.
I think my favorite part was probably the third stanza. I definitely feel like things I write have already been written. I once had a story of sorts that had VERY similar things to the movie/book Dune. But I hadn’t actually hear of Dune when I made it, so…oops
All in all, I really enjoyed reading your poem! I hope to see more of your work around! Stay safe and keep writing!
-Lizzy
Thanks for the review! I'm glad these limericks made you laugh, that was most of what I was going for. Mmhmm sometimes it does seem like every story has already been written in some form . . .
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('read' (past tense) rhymes with 'zed', which is how that letter is pronounced outside of the US
I see, that makes more sense
Ooh…those were fun limericks to read.Yes,I do relate to some of these.I could have an idea and find out that it’s already been done.It’s frustrated and annoying,but then,I can come up with other ideas that I have.These were just very nice to read.I enjoyed this.I hope you have an amazing and awesome day and night!
Thanks for the review! I just wanted to ask: how did you feel about the word choice 'beans' in the following bit?
When writing this I was a bit iffy about using the beans idiom myself, but hey, thought it'd be nice to get another opinion.c:
I thought it was nice,I liked it.
But I also thought maybe it could say:%u201DHe%u2019d spilt his secrets.%u201D As a more %u201Cpoetical touch.%u201D
I did like the poem,though.
Thanks for the suggestion! c: Secrets would change the rhyme scheme, I think, but hey, it's an interesting consideration.
You%u2019re welcome!
These are fun and definitely relatable! Especially the subject of feeling like everything good & original has already been written and then the contrasting problem of trying to jump into a trend like in this case "Z" titles and then that failing too. xD Reminds me of the YWS period when if you didn't mention rib-cages in your poem it was not going into the lit spotlight. That was an interesting trend in yws poetry for sure.
They also all have a very nice flow, that feel very natural to read aloud.
Thanks for sharing these Lim; you're kinda making me want to try out limericks again.
~ alliyah
Thanks so much, alliyah! I hadn't noticed those two were contrasting problems, so super cool observation there. :0
Oh wow xD
Also, I'd love to see you write some limericks yourself