Young Writers Society


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Lessons From a Ghost

by Liminality


Text:

If you do not trust them,

do not be present to their decisions.

If you do not love them,

do not take to heart their problems.

If you want to stay alive,

stay away from unwilling assassins.

Hijack typewriters. Switch on music.

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If you embody a ghost,

they cannot drink your blood.

If you possess a mountain,

they cannot hurt you by accident.

If you float gently,

they are not permitted to blame you.

Be translucent. Live elegantly.


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Mon Dec 19, 2022 6:23 am
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This is the struggles of trusting someone indefinitely, they leave you in the murky water and watch you drown, you hand them a gun and they shoot you in the head, you hand them a knife and give them a choice, they stab you in the back, they call the wolves and watch you get mauled to death with a smile on they're faces, they feed you to bears and they walk away, you can never trust anyone truly without them killing you in the process without your realization.




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Wed Nov 30, 2022 1:12 pm



This poem brightened up my day. It gives a good message to everybody. This reminds me of an old dream I had. It gives me strange goosebumps and this meand to me that you are a good writer. Keep it up!




Liminality says...


Thanks for the comment! I'm glad the poem brightened up your day.



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Tue Nov 29, 2022 1:11 pm
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It seems really well written. You obviously put a lot of thought into this work. It seems like someone told me this poem in real life, Honestly I'm really surprised this was a poem. It seems like you could turn it into a short setting. I don't think you need to Re - Edit it at all. It's Perfect, I hope you will be writing for a while.




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Thanks for the review!



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Lessons all of humanity could learn. What I liked about this poem was the mention of a ghost in a positive way. Like the friend who is always there for you, who is wise beyond their years. The friend who is the ghost that left their previous life long ago and is now pursuing something more. A journey into bliss and happiness, glowing pale and soft for those who wish to follow.

I wish you a wonderful day/night.




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Thanks for the review!



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Liminality says...



By the way, I wrote this following this writing exercise, which I do recommend! (Especially because it's based on one of my fave poems.) This was quite an interesting one to write.





Fairy Tales are more than true; not because they tell us that dragons exist, but because they tell us that dragons can be beaten.
— G.K. Chesterton