Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world)
And Chapter 12 begins. I hope I can get through this and the next one today, then all I have is 14 to tackle tommorow.
First Impression: So everybody is going to back Resador. Sounds great except Buck is going to be unmasked if that happens. Wonder how that's going to turn out.
Let's get to it then,
Suddenly the door swung open and Erson powered past them both into the corridor they were standing at the end of. Merhen’s chambers were along from Erson and Myal’s, but not off to the sides. There was a door right at the end that opened into a much wider area. You could see the cylindrical walls of the chambers from the outside, in fact Buck had often wondered what actually took up that space.
This is a great description although that line about the location seems a bit unclear. Thing is this description feels a bit unnecessary in here. Things are moving fast here and it feels the pacing gets a little too slowed down by the sudden long description.
A smile started to form, mouth slowly turning upwards on both sides at once. He glanced from one of them to the other. "Well, I'm getting married."
"Yeah!" Myal cried out. She ran around and draped her arms over Erson's shoulders.
They both seem a little too excited for this fake marriage. I'd expect the emotion to be more resigned and sound more like he's steeling himself to get through the unpleasant of a grand plan. Essentially marrying Pires would be something that he hates so he would be excited for his plan's success but at least a little bit resigned to the fact that he has to do this thing which he doesn't really want to.
Erson grinned and nodded. "That's right. No longer will one be shunned for marrying who they want, or so strapped for cash they have to scam innocent bystanders just to buy a goddam boat!"
Okay the whole cash part seems a little shoehorned in just for the reference to Raddig. I mean we never saw evidence of poverty before.
There was silence for a few moments. Buck watched Erson, but he just kept staring at one spot in space then another, saying nothing. Buck tapped Myal's shoulder then motioned with his eyes towards the door. Myal bit her lip, watching Erson, but eventually she nodded.
Here the reaction is much more likely. The earlier one, of a little bit more mellowed down, would compliment this well.
"Were you deeply involved in the city?" Myal asked. "I hadn't actually realised. That would explain many of your talents."
Secrets will be spilled by the looks of it or at least disguises will be worn. Also what about poor Victane and Hillene. They left their homes on behalf of Buck and aren't even worth a mention in his thoughts?
Buck was getting too far away to properly hear Erson’s next sentence, but given Myal’s excited shrieks a moment later he felt it safe to assume she’d just been formally invited to come to Resador, whether with her mother’s permission or without.
Okay looks like we shall all be returning to Resador pretty soon. Random question was Resador made from the word Residence?
And that's it for this one.
Overall: Pretty good start to the twelfth chapter. I feel like this will end with them all arriving in Resador.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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