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A Fool's Bucket - Ch. 17.2

by ExOmelas


The next day Buck’s hangover didn’t abate until well after noon; it had in fact been a fantastic night. He wandered sleepily towards the palace in the mid afternoon sun, smiling at some memories that filtered back into his groggy mind. There had been singing, standing on tables, both at once. For some reason the baby had latched onto Victane and snuggled up in his lap. This left Misene and Wailune to join in with a game of cards that lasted the entire night.

One person’s turn could take forever in this game though, so most of the time was spent with everyone else telling stories and making jokes as they waited for the current player to switch cards around between people’s hands. You could choose to end your turn at any time, but the more you swapped cards, the better a hand you could make. But given you technically didn’t know what cards you were choosing and were going by estimation of who had picked up what and when, you were in danger of messing up your sets if you went on too long.

Buck chuckled as he strolled onto the main road to the palace, remembering Rydone’s pained groans as she surrendered her turn without putting a single pair down in front of her. He hadn’t felt this relaxed heading to the palace in quite some time. As he neared the courtyard, the slight breeze blowing down the road was even livening up his brain. He yawned, shook his head, and said a quick hello to the guard as he walked in through the gate.

“Hi, Buck,” the guard said. She pointed around towards the side of the palace. “That ambassador person said to send you around to the stables. I think that’s where they’re keeping her floating carriage thingy. Prince Erson’s with her, just so you know.”

“Oh, thanks,” Buck said. He nodded once then picked up speed a bit. He didn’t really want to stay and answer the types of questions palace guards tended to ask him, not if Erson’s attitude towards him was the current hot topic of gossip.

But the warmth of the sun on his brick red tunic brought some calm quickly back to him, and he was able to shrug off the moment with a literal shake of his head. Erson would probably be on his best behaviour with the ambassador anyway – at least he had been so far. Buck did wonder if that would continue, given that it was Erson and his family that Alkset was interested in, rather than much of anything Pires had to offer. Still, maybe Erson was worried any lack of professionalism would scare Alkset off. As Buck rounded the corner into the stables and spotted Erson closely examining the mechanisms of Alkset’s floating carriage, Buck reckoned that was the last thing Erson wanted.

Alkset was leaning over the carriage, having what seemed like a very intense conversation with Erson. He looked up from what he was doing to respond to her a lot, and her eyes widened as they saw Buck.

But she stood up straight and called out to him. “Afternoon, Buttane! You picked out some interesting songs to teach me? Remember, I need at least some of your most accurate histories, but I want to learn about your culture too. Sing me some of your favourites.”

Buck was curious about what had been being discussed before, but it didn’t take a master of diplomacy to know that he probably shouldn’t ask. Instead he patted his bucket, which contained sheaves of papers full of song lyrics and musical notation. “Don’t worry, I have more chronicles jammed into my head than I care to relate. Are you ready?”

Alkset shook her head and gestured towards Erson. “Not sure about leaving this one here alone with the carriage. A little afraid he might figure out how to drive it and steal the thing.”

“It is fascinating,” Erson murmured. He stood up stretched his arms out. “I don’t understand a thing though. Just taking in what I can observe at the moment. I can’t wait for you to teach me how it actually works.”

Alkset tilted her head back and forth, miming weighing something up. “Well, it may take a long time to explain the actual physics, but I can certainly get you proficient in driving it. That’s what I actually meant when I offered this for the diplomatic exchange.”

“I’ll take that,” Erson said, “though I’d love to learn the science some day.”

“That can certainly be arranged,” Alkset said, glancing towards Buck.

“Uh… not by me,” Buck said, “I’m hopeless at anything involving numbers. Music is the closest I get to science.”

Alkset winced. “Oops. I meant your father. It’s one of his inventions.”

“Oh,” Buck said. “That’s cool. Why is that an oops?”

Alkset glanced at Erson, whose face was a mask. She said, “I’m not really meant to be so liberal with the details I give you of your father, which I was telling Erson this afternoon. But it’s difficult, because I spend a lot of my time arranging for his inventions to be traded with other nations, so talking about him is pretty much my job. But the council… they don’t want me to discuss him too much with you, as part of the deal struck with Pires’s father was that Buck’s father would cut ties with his old life. They think that discussion of him so far away from their domain is contradictory to that.”

“Huh,” Buck said. He wasn’t sure that made sense at all, but he wasn’t about to pick a fight. “Well, I guess that’s understandable. It’s okay though. I’d love to hear more, but I’ve waited this long – I can wait a little longer. How much longer do you think I’ll have to wait?”

“Well, we’ve managed to settle on a goal that will represent the royal family’s co-operation with us. Erson’s going to get us a copy of the minutes of the meeting in which war was decided upon. No matter the reason, I personally consider that adequate. It’s about openness – if that means exposing your own parents for hawks, then that’s open enough for me,” Alkset said. She looked at Erson, “Right, Erson?”

Erson cleared his throat. “Like I said, I think it’s far from certain that the meanings will expose excess warmongering from my parents. But if that is the outcome, then I am content with sharing this information to further diplomatic policy in the next generation.”

That was a slogan and a half, Buck thought. He decided not to voice that particular thought though. Erson had got awfully stiff, and Buck wondered if maybe this was the discussion that had distracted them from their carriage examinations.

“Actually, Alkset, I’m going to head off and start letter writing. If I hurry I actually think I can get one sent away today,” Erson said. Before Alkset could protest, he nodded once to each of them then hurried off.

When he was gone, Alkset turned to Buck and grimaced slightly. “Think I went a bit far there. He was talking about his parents’ war as if it were a childish lark all day, but I should have thought about how it would feel coming from an outside source.”

Buck nodded. He’d made the same mistake plenty of times in his career as court jester. “He’ll be alright, just give him some space. Come on, let’s go to the performance hall. I’ll show you how I would put on a show around here.”

Walking around the side of the carriage, Buck headed for the back of the stables, right up against the wall of the palace.

“Wait, where are you going?” Alkset asked as she jogged up to him.

Buck pressed on a stone at about waist height until a door handle popped out. He heaved open the door. “I figure openness includes opening the doors of secret passages.” He leaned back and gestured towards the entrance. “After you.”


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I would have been SO surprised if Alkset was able to give the physics explanation of how the carriage worked as she almost sounded like she could. XD BUT she totally explained later who it was she was referring to for that.

And gosh, I feel just SO bad for Buck's father. I mean, I did before, but Alkset's conversations is just one reminder after another how Buck0's father is being used. Forced to work for someone else without the freedom of seeing his family? I guess he's at least getting some credit or exposure as Alkset was clearly okay with giving him the credit for the carriage and other inventions, but he's also not allowed to opt for a different employer, y'know? I really just like this council less and less for being okay allowing this type of behavior to happen.

I guess now that I think about it, the fact that Pires and Erson didn't know about this council before.... Maybe it was new and hasn't made any headlines? Otherwise, why was it so secret that even Prince Erson hadn't heard of it? Hmm...

But my conspiracy theorist is showing. XD 'Cause I know you mentioned Alkset isn't supposed to sound suspicious, at least earlier when we met her, but I can't help but think Buck is making a mistake showing Alkset this secret passage either. This just seems like a really bad idea for some reason and I'M VERY CYNICAL APPARENTLY.

Gosh, I need to reread what Erson's doing here with Alkset.... This feels like a red flag to me, but I can't pinpoint it, so I'm going to do the classic Jabber thing and jabber about it. So Erson's planning to give Alkset the minutes, or basically the agenda and what was discussed and the outcome of the meeting, that indicates why they decided on war in the end. I can't remember now, so correct me if I'm wrong or this was mentioned before, but is the nation they're at war with a part of the council? I'm guessing not, but either answer could bring on an interesting twist as well as spawn their own hypotheses as to what's going to happen. What if Alkset's home or the council HATE the country Erson's parents declared war on? What if there's a hidden agenda?? AHHHH I DON'T KNOW.

I suppose the meeting would have been unconfidential, so the public would know about what was decided on in the war room and maybe they also know of the discussions within? I guess I don't know how much of this discussion is publicly known and whether or not Erson is giving Alkset Top Secret information. But maybe I'm overthinking it? XD If it's public information Erson is giving her, then it's fine, but it feels like there's an air of anxiety about this coming from Erson that makes me wonder there's more to the minutes than the public probably knows. Which means, he could potentially be releasing classified information that could harm another's reputation (in this case, most likely his mother). And that's the risk Erson is willing to take to earn a position on this council to further his own personal agenda. He's putting his parents' political career as well as his personal relationship with his parents at risk for his own political agenda. Which could also mean risking his relationship with Myal, though she's kind of a toss-up since she supports him so much to begin with.

I dunno, I'm being skeptical again. And I also detest politics IRL, but this feels doggone fishy to me and something is brewing in the background and I simply don't know what it is. So I guess I just have to keep reading! (I feel like I'm building tension up on my own here LOL. My dramatic brain is hopeless. But it's so much fun for me!)




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Okay, I think you broadly are being suspicious of the things I hoped you would be. There are definitely two things that I hope don%u2019t quite add up - Erson seeming to be cooking something up with Alkset and the contrast between how casually Alkset talks about Buck%u2019s father despite the way he has been treated. Does that fit at all? Also, the reason that they hadn%u2019t heard about the council is that Alkset comes from really quite far away and they haven%u2019t had any contact since the incident with Buck%u2019s father, so they would not have got as far as hearing about that if that makes sense.

Thanks for the review! :D



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Thanks for the tag! I'm back for another review xD


The next day Buck’s hangover didn’t abate until well after noon; it had in fact been a fantastic night. He wandered sleepily towards the palace in the mid afternoon sun, smiling at some memories that filtered back into his groggy mind. There had been singing, standing on tables, both at once. For some reason the baby had latched onto Victane and snuggled up in his lap. This left Misene and Wailune to join in with a game of cards that lasted the entire night.

This who section is lovely! I'm glad Buck is getting to enjoy some time with his friends, and I like that we're seeing a bit of life outside the palace. It fleshes out the story nicely and I think it stops it feeling like characters such as Misene and Wailune are just there to fill space. They're really developing into characters I care about :)


He didn’t really want to stay and answer the types of questions palace guards tended to ask him, not if Erson’s attitude towards him was the current hot topic of gossip.

Not quite sure how he's picked up that he's the gossip? Was it something in the guard's tone or expression maybe?


Buck did wonder if that would continue, given that it was Erson and his family that Alkset was interested in, rather than much of anything Pires had to offer.

Wouldn't that make him more likely to behave rather than less likely?

Still, maybe Erson was worried any lack of professionalism would scare Alkset off.

Ah, yes, I agree!


As Buck rounded the corner into the stables and spotted Erson closely examining the mechanisms of Alkset’s floating carriage, Buck reckoned that was the last thing Erson wanted.

What was the last thing he wanted? Lack of professionalism?

“Not sure about leaving this one here alone with the carriage. I'm A little afraid he might figure out how to drive it and steal the thing.”

I think you may want an I'm in here somewhere. It sounds odd as is, even in speech.

Why is that an oops?”

I assumed she just said oops because she looked at Buck instead of explaining.

Erson’s going to get us a copy of the minutes of the meeting in which war was decided upon. No matter the reason, I personally consider that adequate. It’s about openness – if that means exposing your own parents for hawks, then that’s open enough for me,” Alkset said. She looked at Erson, “Right, Erson?”

Erson cleared his throat. “Like I said, I think it’s far from certain that the meanings will expose excess warmongering from my parents. But if that is the outcome, then I am content with sharing this information to further diplomatic policy in the next generation.”

Hmm, interesting. Does Erson have that power?

“Think I went a bit far there. He was talking about his parents’ war as if it were a childish lark all day, but I should have thought about how it would feel coming from an outside source.”

I wasn't aware that's what she had done.

“I figure openness includes opening the doors of secret passages.” He leaned back and gestured towards the entrance. “After you.”

Uh oh, that seems dangerous!

I'm definitely ready for some conflict here! You've set up the plot very nicely so far, I can't help but feel something big is going to happen...

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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

And I finally got around to this. Took me a while....sorry

First Impression: Hmm...this chapter was pretty interesting actually...the information about Buck's father is pretty loose and this sounds slightly cartoonish but I think that is the sort of story that you go for if all the other moments of humor is anything to judge by so I believe that's not an issue. And I sense that maybe some actual tension might be coming if you ominous warnings are anything to go by.

Anyway let's get right to it,

The next day Buck’s hangover didn’t abate until well after noon; it had in fact been a fantastic night. He wandered sleepily towards the palace in the mid afternoon sun, smiling at some memories that filtered back into his groggy mind. There had been singing, standing on tables, both at once. For some reason the baby had latched onto Victane and snuggled up in his lap. This left Misene and Wailune to join in with a game of cards that lasted the entire night.


Well at least he enjoyed himself a bit. After the kind of times that he has been suffering through he deserves it.

“Hi, Buck,” the guard said. She pointed around towards the side of the palace. “That ambassador person said to send you around to the stables. I think that’s where they’re keeping her floating carriage thingy. Prince Erson’s with her, just so you know.”


Lack of names means this won't be a guard that matters to the story I see.

Alkset was leaning over the carriage, having what seemed like a very intense conversation with Erson. He looked up from what he was doing to respond to her a lot, and her eyes widened as they saw Buck.


Not sure why her eyes widened there? If she told the guard to send him there wouldn't she have been prepared.

Buck was curious about what had been being discussed before, but it didn’t take a master of diplomacy to know that he probably shouldn’t ask. Instead he patted his bucket, which contained sheaves of papers full of song lyrics and musical notation. “Don’t worry, I have more chronicles jammed into my head than I care to relate. Are you ready?”


Smart Move Buck.

“I’ll take that,” Erson said, “though I’d love to learn the science some day.”


Me too Erson. Me too.

“Well, we’ve managed to settle on a goal that will represent the royal family’s co-operation with us. Erson’s going to get us a copy of the minutes of the meeting in which war was decided upon. No matter the reason, I personally consider that adequate. It’s about openness – if that means exposing your own parents for hawks, then that’s open enough for me,” Alkset said. She looked at Erson, “Right, Erson?”


Well Erson can talk all about how he hates the war now.

Buck pressed on a stone at about waist height until a door handle popped out. He heaved open the door. “I figure openness includes opening the doors of secret passages.” He leaned back and gestured towards the entrance. “After you.”


And there goes his ability to spy on any meetings with the ambassador.

Aaand that's it for this one.

Overall: The pacing is fine...we have hit a bit of a lull but that's an unavoidable thing when you finish the second act and get started on the third act of the story so that's okay as long as the pace picks up when we hit the spicy bits. Alkset is sounding wonderful so far and her personality is continuing to develop so that's great.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

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Harry





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