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I absolutely love this poem, the first two lines literally drew me in! I think that this is captivating, every word leaves me wanting more! and the use of image and paradox:') ironically, this poem flowed well, just like the fountain pen. This is dark, emotional, and i love it! Keep writing!
to start it off, congrats! for the top five.
honestly, the moment i started reading your poem and got on to finish the first two lines which are :
"it's insatiable, this dwelling nonsense,
drinking back words that well like fountain pens"
i was like "wow" that's just genius. you know, the first two lines were enough to draw me into the piece. and i was relieved the see the rest of it were just as juicy. i liked the way you made the lines flow such elegantly almost like you're playing with words. it kind of , to say, transported me back to a short story i read a little while back called "the village after dark" by Kazuo Ishiguro as both of it showcased somewhat the same organized, fertile, filled with language play and of course with a lot of emotional commitment.
over all, really liked it.
Puck
Beautiful, as always.
I particularly loved those lines -- its really such a beautiful way to describe that feeling.
OMG really? dude I want to write like this!!