the surface ends here, too

Please work on the grammar. I love what you're trying to say. It's such a wonderful metaphor. It's such a shame that it's wasted on such poor grammar. I also think (warning personal opinion coming) that it should be sweat instead of perspiration. Sweat provides for better imagery.

Anyways, good work. Keep it up and just proofread.

Interesting. It needs grammar, and maybe a little rework to make the purpose of the poem clearer. The description is good, but unclear in that t doesn't create an image or understanding in my mind of what is happening.

The first line is quite good, a great hook that drew my interest, and creates a vivid mental image. The second line, I did not understand. The third line was good, and the fourth and fifth.

It seems to me that the character is creating some kind of guide with the silver patches, so that he will know where he came from and where he ended, like a trail of breadcrumbs.

I'm honestly a little confused.
Maybe its just me, but I have no idea what is happening. When I think I get it, I read the next line and I become completely dumbfounded. I can guess at what you're talking about though:
1) its about someone in sports.
2) Vampire? The line "i sink my teeth in graphite sticks" gives that impression. Maybe I just pay too much attention to the Twilight series.
3) A depressed person. Or maybe that's just the majority of poems.
Other than that, little dots come across my mind. As in, I don't get it.
Your writing is great, though!