before I go
I had to tell you this
I love you
more than
I’d love anything else
I’m leaving because
I can’t take it anymore
because
I’m never with you
and it’s driving me crazy
you’re always around
when I’m not
you say you’re in love with me
and I’m sorry
it has to end this way
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Protip: this is a palindrome poem, so read is forwards and backwards! (also that's why punctuation and such is not included)
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Wow,
A palindrome poem ??
I just heared about it but i am reading it the first time.
I,being honest, felt something strange in the poem when I was reading it from top to bottom there was something lacking but when i read your tip ,i started reading it from bottom and then it all made sense what was adsent in the above lines.
So a very good use of suspence in your poem .Welldone
Wow, a palindrome poem! This kind of writing style is new to me.
A poem which can be read forward and backward is completely new to me and I'm amazed!
A salute to your creative mind. I will definately try a palindrome sometime soon.
And about the poem, it is very nice.
I like the backward version better.
Keep writing!
Okay, fortis. You're over here, introducing me to a new style of poems, and you're completely blowing my mind here. This is amazing.
Now that I've barely learned what a palindrome poem is, I can say that this poem was pretty freaking awesome, both frontwards and backwards. It was honestly a genius thing to do and I applaud you for it. You did a great job and I enjoyed it very much.
A piece of honest feedback -- rereading the poem both ways again, and I feel that you made more sense with the backwards way. Towards the end of the frontwards way can have someone crinkling their nose in confusion (or maybe that's just me). It's nothing drastic, and nothing you really need to fix. I just prefer it backwards because it has a better flow to it and it makes more sense.
Overall, this is awesome, I love this, and I will be trying this now. Great job with teaching me how and doing a beautiful job.
-Iggy
Hi fortis, Cheetah here to review your poem.
I love palindrome poems! They amaze me every time I read them.
I loved the message here. It was very clear and it made sense. Reading it down, the narrator liked someone who doesn't like him/her back, and it's the opposite when read up.
In the first line, however, there was no capitalization. I know it works when read backward, but I think since the reader reads the poem top to bottom first, the 'before' should be capitalized. Just a suggestion, totally optional.
Other than that, there's nothing I can critique! This was excellent!