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Hi!!
Your poem is so much rythmic. great job. I really like it's figure.
YWS FRIEND...
Chloris
What was I just saying about depressing poems?!?
This is very good, this much is obvious, despite short poems not being my area of expertise. The thing I do know about short poems is that they should pack a lot of meaning, and this does exactly that. I don't think anyone could read this without being moved, or at least concerned about your self esteem. My only piece of criticism is that the last lime (do two words count as a line?) should have a capital letter. Other than that very well done.
Hope this helps,
Take That You Fiend!
Hallo. A short review here today.
The main thing that sticks out in this poem is the formatting of the line structures. The open and broken form really helps reinforce what's being said in the poem. It also does a pretty decent job at placing emphasis on the ideas in the poem. It also gives the poem a distinctive although slightly jagged flow. That makes it interesting.
My one qualm with this is the inconsistent punctuation. A key thing to note when writing poetry is to keep your punctuation (or lack thereof) consistent. A lack of consistency can be a bit jarring when reading a poem. Something that I've noticed with your punctuation is that you seem to stick to the standard and sterilized punctuation taught in school. Something that might be worth trying is experimenting with punctuation and capitalization e.g. not using any punctuation or capitals at all.
While this is a step in the right direction in terms of developing your own style of poetry, I still recommend going and reading lots of poetry and looking at techniques and style in those. Look at strange structures like that seen in E.E. Cummings "Loneliness" and so forth. Read those poems to help bring inspiration and encourage experimentation in your style.
The simplicity of this poem is a nice thing too. The way you've summed up the thought/emotion in such a small but creative way is one of the core parts of poetry. It helps get the message across and really matches the theme in this poem.
Anyways, hope this helps and as always, keep writing!
- noninjaspresent >(>==)>*
Hey, Yubbies21!
I'm Euph, and I'm here to review your poem.
Let me start of by just saying one word: Wow.
That's all I can really say to express my reaction to this poem. The way you capture the question at hand of whether the narrator is worthless and stupid like everyone else at hand, in such a simple manner is astonishing.
A lot of people say that if a poem, article, novel, essay, etc. isn't long, it is not elaborated enough, and therefore not worth addressing. This poem shows that those people are wrong. In such a short poem, you managed to capture the emotions perfectly, and if you dragged it out, it would backfire.
Anywho, congratulations on a job well done.
Wow, yubbies21,
It seems like everyone thinks that "long is better than short" these days, but with this, I am now convinced that that's wrong. I read it once, twice, thrice. On the fourth time, I finally fully understood. I somehow feel a connection between me and this poem. Please keep writing! I love this style
KRose
Hey, this is Alf again with a very short review for a very short piece
. It's like a mirror-mirror type of title. And a semi-palindrome (per phrase, of course 
) Now, for the rest of the piece. The from is very free and open. Well, it is a free verse, but the sense of the very short lines combined the free verse form gives a serious, fading effect, implying some sadness and acceptance. These themes of profound regret and sorrow fits perfectly with the rest of the piece's aspects, including the style and word choice.
And try to see if you can add more to this piece because even though I'm happy with this piece, I am a bit hanged due to the very short conflict-solution. Don't drop the solution though, 'cause I love it 
I wish I've helped even by a bit 
First, I like the title of this piece
Speaking of which, your word choice is very limited. This also goes well with other aspects. Unlike others, you also limited the usage of imagery. I can't say this is bad, 'cause even though the vivid imagination is hard to form here, feelings and emotion are really present and is profound. This is a good craft all in all.
Remember that poems needn't capitals at the start of the lines
That's all I can review to your piece
Your pal,
Al
For some reason I like this poem. It's not particularly great, but it does have a message. It simply brings to mind this topic, but I've had a lot of experience with this type of hopelessness and being void of any self-worth. I would expand this poem, if I were you, to explore the emotion more completely. This, in my opinion, is the the very frail skeleton of a poem.
Wow. I really like this.
I don't know if you meant to give this kind of message but it does actually make me think of someone who maybe finds it hard to read or write, maybe someone who is dyslexic or has learning disabilities and is asking, am I worthless? Maybe it's because of the disjointed way that you have written it, but that's what it came across as to me. xD
My one and only nitpick is the 3rd line, 'Really Worth-' < I dunno if you meant to, but the capitol on the 'W' looks a bit out of place to me... I dunno. xD But then if you were trying to give the message I stated then I guess that would work.
Cya!
Hey there,
My name is Tsukarin, this piece here sounds really sad.
I think I can relate to this, because sometimes I wonder about it too.
"Am I really that worthless? Am I really that stupid?" But the one thing is if everyone is stupid then who are those who are called smart. Because without stupid people, the smart people can't be called smart. In the end, you yourself have to judge if you are or not worthless to someone else.
Right now, no one can tell what they are good at so they often think they are talentless while other people seem to be so far ahead. But even so, I think it is great for you to try to convey your feelings through your words.
I hope one day, you come back to this poem and go "Ah, I found the thing I am good at, and maybe put it somewhere where other people read and think hard about it.
Tsukarin