everyone, everyone, no one, no one.

Hello there, yubbies! I enjoyed reading this poem. I like the way it's structured, and the repeated line works well. All the questions that are asked are very interesting, and they work together to create a thought-provoking poem.

I especially like the ending. A lot of rhetorical questions are asked, but when the narrator settles on an answer, it makes for a powerful line, and it leaves a strong message about people's actions.

I have a few small suggestions. If the "everyone, everyone, no one, no one" line ends with a question mark each time, it might make the ending feel stronger. It would make "no one" feel more like a definitive answer to all the questions.

When works hand are caked in mud,
who cleans it?

When crimes are committed,
who witnesses it?

Hi!
I really enjoyed this piece. I like how the questions are open ended and have a nice flow. It gives a feeling of emptiness and loneliness with the way it was spaced out and left room for thought. I personally enjoyed the space in between.

I really enjoyed the lines:
"When the last hair falls from a balding head,/who mourns it?
When the first snowflake flutters,/who cheers it?"

It makes me think of how sad it is that no one is around to witness these instances, and how we don't cherish things as much as we should. Like I said, it makes a reader think. It gave a great perspective on the idea of sentimentality and nostalgia, cherishing every moment we get until it's gone.

The repetition is beautiful. It keeps a person wondering and makes sure they do not forget a common theme. Without the repetition, using the line once wouldn't have put as much meaning into it as repeating it. I like how you believed that too.

A great poem with lots of great points! Awesome job!

Hey, I have to say that this is a very original poem, and I enjoyed reading it very much.

To start off with, I would get rid of the unnecessary line breaks, they don't add anything to the poem and anything that doesn't add to a poem, shouldn't be there in the first place. It's not bad, but like I said it doesn't add anything.

I loved your use of rhetorical questions, I think it really adds to the point that you are trying to get across with this poem. I also love how every question is addressed, I think it's very original and adds a hint of allusions to your work.

One thing I did not understand on the other hand is your use of repeating the words everyone and no one in the chorus's. I would just state each one once, since in my opinion it doesn't add any power to the poem and sounds too repetitive. Other than that, I really loved the way you repeated the chorus after every stanza, it's a nice use of repetition.

All in all, I really liked this poem and hope to read some more by you soon. As always keep writing and have a great day!