Young Writers Society

"a lots of trouble I used to do" should be just a lot or lots
This is a really cute song with a nice message. It has a nice tune that's even coming through with just the lyrics.
However, I feel like the poem might be a bit generic. There's no specific details about you or your mother to make the poem particularly memorable. Part of that is because it's so short you don't really have time to. I encourage you to expand on this poem, to tell us more about your mother and your relationship with her.
Have a Merry Review Day and a Happy New Year.
-tgirly

It's really a good master piece you manage to write a lyrics of how you feel for your mom.......It show your emotion about this it's little of comfort and love to a special mother.This lyrics make me look at my relationship with my mom and I realized some of this as some my fun times with my mom.

Well you really put your emotions a lot.Well people a lot show it in different ways,right?

Well not only you think of your mom as a mother but also a friend.That what I think Of my mom well I hope you see it too at your mom.

My favorite part is this:

i know i’m grown up now

but ,mum it’s not too late,

to put a smile on your face,

cause you’ll always have that precious place

only god knows how much you mean to me

It's really spoke to me it also make me in tears LOL

That's all I can say for now

Keep up the good work

And always continue your creativity and lyrics and others things

From,

ILB123

Hey There.
This is a really good piece. You've managed to word the emotions that not all of us feel comfortable speaking. My relationship with my mother isn't so good, but your piece made me look at it and have some realizations.

There is one tiny error I'd like to point out:
'a lots of troubles i used to do'
This should be either 'a lot of trouble' or 'lots of trouble'. And I've always read trouble being 'Created', not 'done', so you may want consider changing the 'do'.

Overall it's a good piece.

Harshita