i love you

Hey Smile, I'm Strange, and I'm going to attempt to pull a quick review due to the lack of the time. I would give a more detail one, but I'm so sorry.
Nonetheless, I really liked this "Other" The idea is a little bit overused, but the lyrics worked well. The idea is simple. "You have my heart forever and ever and no one will take it away." It shows that you're committed to this one person. I liked that. The only problem was the idea. I've seen this before, but for some reason you made it above average. The way you used the "lyrics" and how well it flowed is probably why. Good job, Smile.
Overall, good job
Strange gives you...
7.8/10
Great job
Keep writing
Stay groovy, my friend.

Timmy here for a quick review!!

So this poem, like all of yours, is amazing. Its a wonderful work of art that tells an amazing story! Wonderful job! I like how you portray yourself... and how he holds the key to your heart.

I have a few nitpicks, and I will look at them now!

First off, I would have to point out something very small, but still evident in this work. It is quite redundant, being there after almost every line...

You said i have to hold on , ---Not a big deal at all, but all commas, periods and the like should be directly after, not a space inbetween

But enough to cure the wounds of my heart. ---Enough makes it seem like they were ok. Not amazing words, or beautiful, but acceptable... Maybe take it out and say, But they cured the wounds in my heart

I clicked the botton of restart , ---Like Deadman said, botton should be button and of restart doesn't flow very well... Maybe, to restart?

So no one will enter again ..... ---I think you could let out the so and replace it with and... And also one more little thing for this line... If he holds the key, won't he entering again? Maybe add one more line... Save for you or something similar to make the reader be assured that your heart is his?

Good poem, and it is definitely love. I like this poem a lot, and might say to someone. Yeah right, she'd know it wasn't mine the second I started saying it. lol Okay so I really do like this poem, but not a couple of spots in it. So I'm going to address those.

"You said i have to hold on" Capitalize "I"

"I clicked the botton of restart" should be button, and you can keep of restart, it sounds a little weird to me, but I suppose it is okay.

"You have the keys of its tower" Should be "keys to its tower."

Nitpicks really, but as to what I was saying about the Button of restart, it could've been different. You could have made it, "I clicked the button to restart." Of course leaving it the way you wrote it, and making the spelling error would be fine.

I really did enjoy your poem, I'm sorry I'm not much help, but I hope I still helped. The poem covers love perfectly, and you really did a good job. Thanks for the great piece, and I can't wait to see more. Until next time, Happy writing!



Cheers,



Deadman XD

Well, this is exactly what love is. Extremely well written, very likable poem, im guessing. You have very good metaphors. Well thought out, well written, and very fast. 1