Young Writers Society

This was super good! I found myself being able to relate to this because for me it is sometimes difficult to fall asleep. Thank you so much for writing this. It was very interesting to hear your take on a well known issue. It was nice to see someone take on a deeper meaning than just the surface level interpretation of a condition. Keep up the great work! I look forward to reading more.

This is probably just a stylistic thing, but I want to point out the spacing of this poem. I feel like a main theme is losing yourself and the spacing out is kind of the space between reality and what isn't reality. I just think it's really neat. This whole poem just gives me the idea that the narrator is in a haze between an adrenaline rush and the after affects - basically when the party is over (not to reference a certain emo whisper-singer, but I digress.).

My favorite stanza was probably this one;

"Where are you ? the voice inside wondering

That one sided love,which once was a savior

"Never felt this way with anyone" she said"

This is very bittersweet because love, more often than not, is one sided, and sometimes we like to manufacture possibilities that maybe aren't feasible, which just adds to the already established vibe this poem is giving off.

All of this to say; it's beautiful and I love this so, so much.

It seems like it’s about one single night that changes everything. The night when truth is revealed. It’s lost love and lonely nights. I liked the dark and romantic tone of the poem.

I have a question, though. Did you spell “drugs” and ”aren’t” like ”druggs” and “arn’t” intentionally, for an accent? If so, cool. If not, then that’s okay, because I misspell words a lot too.

I wish you a wonderful time and a happy Halloween!