Young Writers Society

Hi

First, I had no idea who Austin Mahone was, so I looked him up on Spotify. You've officially made a fan out of me

I really like this song because so many teen girls can relate to it. It has a great rhythm and flow.

Nitpicks:

i see you walking in

Cuz you’re so amazing

cuz you are so magical

Like a fire is heating or a thunder is living

Loving you is so much hard

Greetings and welcome to the site!

Cuz you’re so amazing

Sudenly its all about you

Forgot about where i im

Sometimes even who i im

When my

My heart start beating

Inside me......

But baby for me you’re my man

Loving you is so much hard

Its like im chasing a cloud

Hi there! I love Avril and Austin too :'D
Anyway, onto the review! These are some really good lyrics, but as the other users have both mentioned; just watch out for slight grammar problems, like capitalize your words when needed

This is my favourite verse, it's so cute;

"Sudenly its all about you

Looking and listening to you

Forgot about where i im

Sometimes even who i im"

So yeah. Just fix up those minor issues, and you'll be good to go!

{{ -devigonewild- }}

boohoo!!, this is great.
I'm bee, and this is your review!
firstly, let me start by saying "it's great that you love Avril Lavigne and Austine Mahone, 'cause, i do too!"
i think you should watch your spelling, or was that on purpose?
i know it's lyrical, but for people to understand you, you have to improve on your punctuation.
beautiful expressions used and it was a joy to read. i really want to know how this would sound. it's short so there has got to be a brief moment of sobbing about how cute he is right?
any way, lovely!

Hi, smile! I want to say that I loved your song and austins gotta be so proud of you. I liked how you started and ended this song.

"i see you walking in" Wasn't the i supposed to be capital? Anyways that is probably a typo so don't worry too much about it.

"The crowd get crazy" This sentence is slightly grammatically incorrect- you should change the "get" to "gets".

"My heart start beating" Another minor error- the start is supposed to be plural.

"Loving you is so much hard" I think deleting the 'much' would make it sound so much better.

"But i will fight"
"Its like im chasing a cloud"
For both: its the i situation again.

Anyway, I cant say how much i loved your song and hope to read more of your fantastic songs again.

- Anshira