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The Adventures of Rose Hood Chapter 5: The Dragon Wrestler

by keeperofgaming


Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for violence.

Mammon POV

Something was odd about that girl. I could tell she was strong just by looking at her, but then she decimated not 1 but 3 A ranks.

Her name was Rose, but she seemed unfamiliar with it, and something didn’t sit right with Royce’s explanation in the letter.

Plus, the fact that she could do that almost instantaneous movement. That was terrifying. Her skill was unmatched and the fact that she and Dallel hit it off was odd.

Dallel was known for being troublesome in conversation. The only person that could handle him was Jalad, and even Jalad got annoyed by him at times.

But that tournament battle was the icing on the cake.

Weapons didn’t seem to affect her, and that spell she used after was an advanced spell. She said she was 19, but her power is far stronger than her age.

“Guildmaster, you called me?”

“Ah, Saliad. I heard you were in the tournament.”

“Yes, but I couldn’t show my skill in the preliminary round. Noone wanted to face me.”

“Well, no kidding, you are an S rank. Frankly, there were concerns about letting you sign up in the first place.”

“Well, Galswell told me that it would be a good idea.”

“That makes sense, his predictions almost always come true.”

“Do you think my match is in this tournament?”

“Possibly, but I don’t see why anyone would want to kill you, you are a hero after all.”

“Oh please, I fought a few monsters, that’s all.”

“Saliad boy, the Dragon Patriarch and Matron aren’t regular monsters.”

“I get that, but I won through surprise.”

“That’s way better than many can do, though now that I think about it.”

“What?”

“There is a girl, the name’s Rose. She decimated the 3 Aces with ease when they tried hazing her. She also brought down Calsen and freed all of his slaves. She also seemed to gain both Dallel and Jalad’s respect.”

“Really, so you think she may be my match?”

“Potentially, I personally hope you two fight, it would be incredible to see.”

“Well, I’ll look forward to it.”

_

The roster got posted in the guild hall.

I looked at it, huh that’s cool.

My first match was against a guy named Galswell.

“Who’s Galswell?”

“You don’t know?”

“Nope.”

“Oh, he’s a legendary A rank fighter. I reckon he could even give you a run for your money. He’s known as the dragon wrestler.”

“Dragon wrestler?”

“Yeah, he supposedly led the charge against the last dragon nest and fought the Patriarch. He and his party won, leading them to legends. Most of us just see him as kinda puny though. Probably because of his age. Though, most people think it was actually the mythic fighter in his party that killed the patriarch.

“Mythic fighter?”

“Yeah, you see the guy on the other side of the board?”

Following his finger, I see Jalad’s first fight, Saliad.

“Poor Jalad.”

“Saliad is an elven warrior a little over 100. He’s an S ranker. Frankly, he’s going to win.”

“Hmm.”

So, that’s the warrior who bested father? I would have to fight him to win.

“Why do you look more confident now?”

Dallel walked in with Jalad.

“Well, I see someone who may actually give me trouble on the list.”

Dallel followed my pointing before snorting and Jalad started complaining.

“How come I’m against such a powerhouse my first round?”

“Well, the kitten isn’t much better off. She’s fighting Galswell.”

“Dang, who are you fighting? Some rando? Favoritism!”

Dallel started laughing.

“I’m surprised you are talking about the Mythic Dragon Slayer as troublesome, Rose. Frankly, I heard you took down the 3 Aces, that’s all well and good, but he could decimate them easily as well. There’s such a power difference between A and S. A can fight legendary monsters, but S can battle mythics. And he killed a mature draconic patriarch. A’s can destroy armies; S’s can destroy nations.”

“None of you have seen me fight seriously.”

“I agree.”

Mammon walked out.

“’Pparently, Rose here fought a dragon ‘erself.”

The adventurers looked at me in shock.

“I didn’t kill it. I scared it with dragonsbane while it was distracted by Sir Royce.”

They all calmed quickly. While still impressive, it was a lot less so.

“Yeah, but the letter from ‘im also said to keep you a low profile, so I’m thinking he and you are underselling your involvement.”

Mammon was certainly smart, so I decided to omit.

“Yeah, I ran like the devil himself was after me when the beast turned to kill me. I came back in time to place dragonsbane.”

“’See. Well, don’t tell me if you don’t want. Just don’t throw the tourney. Bet ‘lotta money on ya, lassie.”

Jalad and Dallel clearly have raised their opinion of me. Humility is something that is lacking these days.

“Hey, looks like me and you are fighting in the second round, Dallel.”

“Huh, well, Rose, looks like I’ll test your metal sooner than expected, and I want to let you know before the round. This gear is S rank. Your little defense trick won’t work.”

“I see, well, I’m still winning.”

We smirked at each other again.

“Just please don’t burn down the arena.”

We both looked at Jalad before simultaneously saying,

“No promises.”

He merely sighed.

_

On the first day of the competition, I watched the fights. I was in the second bracket, meaning my fight was the next day.

Jalad was destroyed by Saliad, while the other matches were quite close. I was surprised to see Darsen in the arena. He was destroying his opponent, another wolfkin. As expected of a mature.

The rest of the day was spent consoling Jalad.

On the Second day, Dallel decimated the rando he was paired with. Then the moment I was waiting for happened.

“Mrs. Hood, your round is about to begin.”

I went down to the arena and saw an elderly man simmering with magic power.

“A little girl? I’m offended. I defeated the Dragon Matriarch and Patriarch singlehandedly. I can decimate you.”

Yeah, he was not strong enough to defeat father or mother. Heck, while his magic was bigger than what I expected, he was about as strong as the Aces together.

“Stronger than expected.”

“Ah, so you can see my strength. You may be stronger than I originally thought as well.”

He seemed not to be an idiot. While his claims were baseless, he clearly had enough brain to fight. Perhaps he will be a challenge.

“FIGHT!”

He immediately sought to take me down in a single blow. I dodged, narrowly avoiding his blast. The shield around the arena swells with the energy of his blast. Not weak, but certainly not strong enough to beat me.

I struck at him, and he barely dodged me. He was fast. He used a legendary magic,

“Nuclear Oblivion!”

I needed to counter that.

“Obliviate!”

I erased his magic with a massive amount of my MP, but mine was so deep that he could never win in a battle of attrition. While he was reeling from my counter, I took advantage and pushed my fist into his gut. Blood spurt as he realized I was no joke.

He leapt back, barely holding on.

“Greater heal.”

His wound closed and he got serious.

“I underestimated you.”

“As did I. Few would still fight after that blow.”

He laughed and then began striking at me with stronger magic and I kept using Obliviate.

We exchanged a few blows before he realized that there was no way he would win at this rate.

“Well, I can no longer hold back. Let’s see if even dust remains.”

I got on guard.

“Divine Destruction!”

He realized that I couldn’t counter that. Smart. His magic knowledge is incredible. I won’t lose, but he will certainly deal some damage.

“Life Foundation!”

He smiled, after all, even life foundation couldn’t survive that. His blast hit me head on. From the arena’s perspective I was just killed. Cheers erupted.

“Well, it looks like Galswell wo-”

I started laughing. The arena went quiet as I stood up. My skeleton was in full view. Only loose pieces of flesh hung on.

“Life eruption.”

My flesh and clothes started to reform on my body as Galswell realized that I was far stronger than he was. His ultimate attack was laughable to me. He realized he’d lose and casted it again, but this time, I was ready.

“Divine Oblivion.”

My spell shot his and caused the barrier to shake. Galswell was low on mana and tried getting distance by running, but I was faster. I kicked his leg off and thrust my fist through his chest, right next to his heart. This paralyzed him and made me the winner.

“I-it l-looks like Rose won.”

The arena was silent. After all, I looked death in the eyes and laughed at it. I walked out of the stage as I finished healing. Healers came out immediately to heal him, and they wheeled him to the infirmary. As I left, I saw a smiling elf. Saliad had watched my fight and taken interest in me. His smile gave me shivers.


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Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

Shalt we commence with the mutated S’more?

Top Graham Cracker - Rose fights another match, this time with Galswell. Nobody expects Rose to beat him, but like the fighter she is, she wins! Someone else will want her on their team…

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - I think that you meant to say “I’m” instead of “im”, but that’s just one little thing.

Chocolate Bar - I liked when Rose was blasted by Galswell and it looked like she died, but then she got up, her skeleton showing, and fought back. Rose is a real powerhouse, she doesn’t disappoint. However, I’m not sure her profile is being kept very low…

Closing Graham Cracker - Another chapter showing off Rose’s strength, I enjoyed reading it! While I do like seeing Rose win, I’m nervous as to what will happen once more people find out about her power…hopefully only the right people get to her…

I wish you a marvelous day/night! ^v^




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Hello Again, My Friend!

It's me, Raven, and I'm continuing today's review in Chapter 5! Let's dive in, shall we? Heh heh heh...

What The Black Eyes See...

Ah, now this was my most favorite fight yet! Someone finally made Rose show at least a *bit* of a struggle; the tension was heavy, enough to keep me at the edge of my seat. Rose's inner dialogue made it even better, as did the buildup from Mammon's perspective. Let's get into the details though.

Where The Dagger Points...

I have no content recommendations to make! This may be my new favorite chapter, I thoroughly enjoyed it! There were a couple of things I would kindly recommend as far as word choice:

“Yes, but I couldn’t show my skill in the preliminary round. Noone wanted to face me.”


I think this is a typo, as there is no space between "no one."

That’s way better than many can do, though now that I think about it.”


Nothing technically wrong with this statement at all, though to give a stronger impression of uncertainty and that he trails off here, perhaps end on an ellipsis? "though now that I think about it..." Just a suggestion, nothing's wrong as it is.

“Huh, well, Rose, looks like I’ll test your metal sooner than expected, and I want to let you know before the round.”


Again, the statement does work as-is, specifically regarding the "test your metal" phrase. "Test your metal" I guess would work as a fantasy saying, pertaining to swords and swordsmanship (the main metric of judging a combatant in these fantasy/medieval settings). However, I got the impression that it was a misspelling of "test your mettle"; this is the more common version of that phrase, and pertains to determination and perseverance while under pressure. Either way works technically, but if you were going for the latter definition, I would recommend changing the spelling of "metal" to "mettle."

Of course, I am not a professional, so please always take my advice with a grain of salt.

Why The Grin Widened...

Ah, so much to love about this chapter!! Where to begin?

Okay, so the introduction and initial impressions of Saliad were great to read. Mammon's perspective was great for that, as surely, his judgment would say a lot about these fighters. And as Saliad is the *true* dragon-slayer, that already has me anticipating a big fight and perhaps some trouble for Rose. Especially as we jump ahead to his next appearance, at the end of the chapter, where he is observing her and Rose feels uneasy. Oh, what a way to set the stage! Dallel gives me the impression that he's a good fighter, but still won't be a match for Rose and won't be much more than a thorn in the side overarchingly. This guy, on the other hand, is giving me bad vibes already. Enough to be a candidate for the "big bad" of the story.

Rose immediately recognizing the slain dragon as her father was an interesting moment. She seemed somewhat emotionless, which I guess is another consistent trait with Rose, and ties well into her continued display of fearlessness, confidence, and potential recklessness by now (with that "staring death in the face and laughing" quote especially). Still, I wonder what the dynamic between Rose and her family was. If she has any memories of this slain relative, and what those memories are like. And of course, I also wonder if she'll make the connection to Saliad, especially since she immediately could tell that Galswell wasn't the real killer. Overall, big points for character consistency and theory material, haha.

Then, of course, that rich fight scene! So tense! So much magic, so much violence! I like the incantations that were getting thrown around, they made the spells sound so gnarly in comparison to the common spells from the mages in past chapters, and they added that "oomph" to the attacks themselves. The descriptions of Rose punching into his stomach and Galswell shredding her to the bone felt so grizzly, then of course this:

I walked out of the stage as I finished healing.


Something about imagining Rose heart-stabbing someone to near-death with her bare hands, while her very flesh is still regenerating, is incredibly bada** and chilling ~

Our Mad Thoughts...

Overall, I very much enjoyed this! Nicely done! :)

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