I'll start off by saying that I really like the simplicity of the way this poem is written, although I will say that the first stanza makes a little more thematic sense to me. Don't get me wrong I like the entirety of this poem, but the second stanza, leads me to a different tone and feeling than the first.
The first stanza made me think that the poem was about an elephant that felt itself lonesome, due to it's position in the animal kingdom. The second stanza on the other hand, makes me think that I should feel sympathy for the elephant, because of the "feed off the pity" line I also not sure what you where trying to emphasize with the "in the room below" line.
Still though, not a bad poem, but maybe if you could make it a little more longer to put more emphasis on what you're trying to say.
8.5/10
Points: 279
Reviews: 7
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