Okay first of all I want to ask you if this is a draft. Because it just doesn't look like one. Writing poems about specific psychological disorders is not easy but you did it so easily. Congratulations! Since I study psychology in school I know about this disorder and have studied in detail about it. So when it comes to glitches in the theme you selected or information you provided, there were none. Now in the note that you had earlier, you asked if you can submit this poem titled 'Obsession'. But i think 'Expulsion' is just fine and apt. You shouldn't change it in my opinion.
Your lines started with small letters but I guess that's because it's a draft so it's fine. The first four lines just made me read the poem. I believe the starting of the poem should be very catchy and your poem had that element.
Your didn't rhyme but that's absolutely not a flaw. Sometimes not rhyming a poem makes it look very attractive.
Your last stanza had your title in it which again made the poem very very nice.
Either I am not able to point out a mistake or you haven't made any!
So great work!
Keep writing!
Best of luck!
Cheers!
Shiksha!
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