GO TEAM WIZARD!
WOW! I love this! The description is perfect, along with punctuation. It gives a saddened vibe, but dark at the same time. I liked how in the third paragraph you referred to the main character in second-person. Then in the last one, you used third-person. This was a very good contrast in my opinion. I couldn't stop one flaw, neither one mistake. Everything flowed perfectly, which is always very hard to do. Anyways, it was awesome, your awesome. Continue writing stuff like this, and good luck. May you find a four-leaf clover today, or tonight. Thanks for the read!
~Laelle
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