I really liked this! I can definitely relate to it, but it is a bit cliche.
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Lovesick is a disease.
It tears your heart apart.
Your chest is crushed,
Or exploding.
You don’t want to eat.
You don’t want to sleep.
When your other half
Is missing.
Things like books and phones
Become gateways to them.
The first reminds you of little things.
The second gives you their words.
Everything’s a reference to them.
Rain, the thing you sang in.
Tree, the thing you climbed in.
Love, the thing you fell in.
They hold your heart,
And you hold theirs.
They are your air, your life.
Apart you’re incomplete.
No wonder they call it lovesick.
I thought it the title was "Love is a Disease" ;P That one caught my interest faster oddly.
This poem, wow, like DEFINES my thoughts 24/7 pretty much. I adore this poem because it's almost like you wrote it at me, for me. I didn't see any grammar mistakes or anything like that at all. I know I probably don't have a lot of advice that could be useful to you since I only have two stars and look at you, you're so experienced! Yet, maybe I can still offer you my praise and thoughts for this poem. Your three words here, rain, tree, love and how you connect them to the idea of "and we did that there at this time, I rember I was wearingm and the weather was-" it just shows how 'Lovesick' you are after any type of relationship how vulnerable your heart is, how much it meant to you, and everything in between! I can't thank you enough for writing those lines because it help me figure out a few of my own thoughts in reality.
Also, this, how you set up the line "When your other half (new line) is missing" that, for me, really gave me a tone for this term you call the title. I didn't quite catch the meaning at first, but looking back at its placement made it then very meaningful to the poem.
So overall, a huge thank youmfor writing this because it was so nicely written. It was short but it had a meaning to it. I know you sympathized with me and I can't imagine what it will do for others. So plainly, thanks for this poem.
~ Music
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Interesting poem... I'm sorry if this is really personal and I'm not kind enough, but here we go.
I thought this is rather cliche. It reminded me of the classic heartbreak poem, many of which can be found here.
Become gateways to them.
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