Conics Unfortunately: 45

Hipster land yielded no results, even though Ellipse checked all the bathrooms twice, and Focci engaged in very indiscreet conversation with every other siren he saw. At least none of the nearby specifus could hear what he was asking, and sirens on the whole ran anti-Spec Corp.

As Focci finished up conversing with a tiny, green-blue siren, Ellipse took a moment to glance around, eyes peeled for any flashing lights that might indicate a specifus translating the conversation. The only lights she could see, however, were the dim lamps hanging from the ceiling and the screens notifying passengers of boarding times and destinations.

She looked over at Tejal, who fidgeted in his chair, a tight frown on his face.

“Something wrong?”

Tejal shook his head, face still stuck in a frown. “Not really. It’s just weird that you didn’t waltz in with a plan this time.”

“I planned out our route,” Ellipse pointed out.

“This station is a big circle. There’s really only two ways we could go.”

Touché.

“Okay but of all three of the Impending survivors,” Ellipse whispered, “we know the least about this one’s whereabouts. We just know Nestor or somewhere in Triune, and we have not run into Captain Maj’s friends to pry hints out of their leaves.”

“If you ask me, I’d rather we didn’t run into them.”

Ellipse squinted at him, vexed.

“I know they’re after Ami and the others, but you—sorry, Elliott—Elliott’s probably worth a lot more, at least in terms of money.”

“Specifus are very bad at recognizing earthlings,” Ellipse replied. She looked back to Focci, who was bidding the smaller siren goodbye and wagging his tail like a happy dog, and then shrugged. “But thanks for the concern, I guess.”

“No problem.” Then, still frowning, Tejal reached into the back pocket of his chair and pulled out the tablet. “Did you learn anything Focci?”

Ellipse probably should have seen it coming, based on the tail-wagging, but she still felt her heart jump in shock when Focci puddled on the floor and sighed, his snout twitching and his gills fluttering like butterfly wings.

“I learned nothing,” he sang, voice as airy as a flute, “except the name of a very cute siren.”

“Did the cute siren spot any specifus with wide kelp leaves for a head?” Ellipse asked, feeling her brow scrunch.

Moments later, Tejal’s cheeks went green, and his frown turned into a mortified grimace. “What exactly constitutes as a cute siren?”

“He said he saw a team of specifus bounty hunters, but that was it.” Focci flopped onto his side and brought up his hands to squish his own cheeks. “But ugh. His tailfin was so pretty! I wish I had a fin like that.”

In the corner of her vision, Ellipse noticed Tejal giving her a panicked look.

She shrugged. “I did not know he did this either.”

“Yeah, there’s this. This is weird,” Tejal hissed, gesturing at Focci. “But did you not just hear Focci mention bounty hunters? If they’re here, then we need to get a move on so we can find Ami first and get out.”

Focci sang a series of arpeggiated notes and rolled onto his back. “Even his name is pretty!”

Pinching the bridge of her nose, Ellipse let out a long sigh. Might as well open the can of worms. Maybe once Focci got his infatuation into words, he would calm down, and they could keep searching. “What is his name?”

Focci sang the arpeggio again, and though Ellipse could not recall an exact definition, she did know that the phrase ‘fish scale’ sounded remarkably similar, just with one less note on the end. Personally, she would not name a child ‘fish scale,’ but to each their own, she supposed. At least the name was melodic.

“And did Fish-scale tell you where he saw these bounty hunters?” Ellipse asked.

At the mention of bounty hunters, Focci stiffened a little. His gills stopped fluttering quite as fast as they had been, and he rolled onto his stomach. “Yeah. They were in the docking area for small private vessels.”

“Oh. We should probably stop asking around,” Ellipse said. She raised an eyebrow at Tejal and shoved her hands in her pockets. “The private docking area is the next section of the station, right?”

Tejal nodded.

“Okay then!” she declared, pointing forwards and marching. “Let us continue!”

The transition into the private docking section was abrupt. The mood lighting and soft, wooden interiors ended with a giant wall made of violet-stained timber and tinted, reflective glass, and suddenly the trio found themselves once again surrounded by concrete and steel on all sides. White fluorescents shone from the ceiling, casting hard shadows when the light hit the copious metal perches stretching overhead. Ellipse spotted a sign for the bathrooms about a hundred meters away, giggling at how the hieroglyphic for ‘bathroom’ in one of the major avian languages just looked like the cartoon poo symbol.

She held up a hand to motion for everyone to stop, and then pointed at the sign. “So before I go check that bathroom,” she sang, “I have a question for you, Focci.”

He hummed a short, curious note.

“We have spent months working on the same ship, and you always seem like the calm, mature one out of us three, so what exactly was with that weird, head-in-an-algal-bloom act back there?”

Focci shrugged and continued moving, as if he had not just adopted a lovesick second personality. “I told you. Pretty siren.”

“Have we not run into any other pretty sirens?”

In the back of her mind, Ellipse registered a change in Tejal’s expression. His brow knit just a small bit, and his breath hitched, but she ignored it. He was probably just having his usual delayed reaction to the arguments.

“Of course I have seen other pretty sirens,” Focci said, his tone still even, “but I have not talked to one since before you came on board.”

That seemed unlikely. Sure they spent most of their time on the Conics, but sirens were not a habitually reclusive species like the tyran, or newcomers to space travel like the saur. Focci should have had several opportunities to at least ogle some other sirens. Ellipse had certainly admired other earthlings here and there.

“Hey guys?” Tejal asked.

“Besides,” Focci continued, “most spacefarers are not an appropriate age for me to look at. As far as crews go, we are all pretty young.”

Okay true. Ellipse probably would not swoon over a thirty-something, regardless of objective attractiveness.

“Guys.”

Ellipse frowned and scratched her head. “You have a point Focci. But that whole thing back there was still weird.”

“Earth to Focci and Ellipse?”

“Onto the bathroom?” Ellipse suggested, gesturing again at the sign with the poo symbol.

“Sure,” Focci agreed, “though first I think Tejal is trying to tell us something.”

So Ellipse had not been wrong when she noticed him frowning. She swivelled her head around to face Tejal as she started forward. “What is up, Tejal?”

“Oh my god.” He slapped his face, rested an elbow on one armrest, and gestured to the grand expanse of space before them, where a small group of specifus wandered towards the Conics crew in a clearly prearranged formation. “Captain Maj’s friends are here.”

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ExOmelas
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Did you seriously write this on Christmas? That is dedication!

Nit-picks:

Well, this first one isn't a nit-pick, so I guess we're going back to when I used to include nice moments as well. I think I've been in too much of a rush to do those today.

“Specifus are very bad at recognizing earthlings,” Ellipse replied. She looked back to Focci, who was bidding the smaller siren goodbye and wagging his tail like a happy dog, and then shrugged. “But thanks for the concern, I guess.”

“No problem.” Then, still frowning, Tejal reached into the back pocket of his chair and pulled out the tablet. “Did you learn anything Focci?”

Okay nowwww we're getting somewhere. Mutually ignoring a topic, perhaps to an unhealthy extent eventually, that's what I want to see from two characters who had an awkward and very personal conversation recently.

“Okay then!” she declared, pointing forwards and marching. “Let us continue!”

Wait, they're marching right to the bounty hunters? That seems very very risky.

Sure they spent most of their time on the Conics

You forgot to put Conics in italics.

So Ellipse had not been wrong when she noticed him frowning.

Or when he kept shouting at them?

Overall:

Okay, we're getting to an interesting place with Ellipse and Tejal now. I hope this kind of awkwardness continues for a while, because it's surprisingly fun to read. I would like to see Focci make reference to it at some point, but their interaction was a little less intense, so it's fair enough if you choose not to make that such a big thing.

The bit with Focci was lovely, and very surprising, which I imagine is what you were going for. Tejal's reaction was kind of interesting... He almost seemed... jealous? I dunno, I just sort of see them as science bros like Bruce Banner and Tony Stark (or Percy and Taryon from Critical Role, if you happen to get that reference xD). If that's where this is going, my god that'll be an interesting twist.

The plot advancement was good, solid pace. Will do my best to read the next chapter when it comes out rather than binging eleven in one day. But on that subject, I just want to say that reviewing this story has been a really enjoyable day. I hope if my team triumphs over yours you can take it as solace that eleven of those came on your story, and that they were so easy to do because you have written such a gripping story. Seriously, good job.

Hope this helps,
Biscuits :)

Oh, you're not winning if I have anything to say about it. But seriously, thanks for taking the time to catch up! Chapter 46 will come out tonight or tomorrow, and I assume you want to be added back into the tagfest?

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Omg Focci <3 He's so adorable in this chapter, even though, okay, yes, now is not the best moment to develop a crush. WHO CARES. It's adorable.

Okay true. Ellipse probably would not swoon over a thirty-something, regardless of objective attractiveness.


That's never stopped me! Although it is true that at this point I'm closer to thirty than twenty, so...but still. Even as a teenager.

I think you've got a good balance in this chapter. Like on the one hand you've got Our Heroes trying to find this specific specifus (heh heh, specific specifus), but then we've got Focci getting distracted, in a way that I think doesn't distract too much from what they're doing - like they barely know where this particular specifus is going to be, and it's the first similarly-aged specifus he's met and spoken to on their travels, and he's mostly spent time with two earthlings, so it makes sense to me that he'd kind of lose track of what they're doing. Even to the point of momentarily not worrying about bounty hunters! But toward the end, even before Maj's friends show up, you've got him losing his high there for a moment when they mention the bounty hunters again. So we get this adorable scene with him and him and Ellipse talking, but it never gets too far from the action which is something I'm bad at

And then of course you reintroduce the drama at the end with these bounty hunters showing up, and I'm really curious to see what happens with that. Like I feel like specifus bounty hunters might not be as dangerous as those other bounty hunters they already came across, but at the same time I feel like they might present their own challenges. Can they use their vines as lassos? Probably.

I'm still kind of waiting for Tejal to get mad at Ellipse for lying to him and not trusting him and refusing to tell him the truth about herself, but I also appreciate the fact that he's understanding of why she needed to hide it and accepting of the reasons she ran away in the first place.

Yeah, I'm pretty proud of this chapter. It feels good to sort of return to the vibe I had going at the very beginning.

Thanks so much!

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BluesClues
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*pokes* Remind me to read this, please.

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TheSilverFox
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“Onto the bathroom?” Ellipse suggested, gesturing again at the sign with the poo symbol.


The pinnacle of humor. :P

Alright, let's go over the grammar and spelling stuff first, because there are a few odd things in this chapter:

“Did you learn anything Focci?”


*anything,

Focci should have had several opportunities to at least oggle some other sirens.


*ogle (I'm not very proud that I know this word)

“Sure,” Focci agreed, “though first I think Tejal is trying to tell us something.”


There's no specific problem that I can identify, it just looks/sounds odd to me (perhaps it doesn't seem too much like what Focci would normally say). Maybe you could remove "first"?

And now, the review:

This chapter is one of the funniest in a while. I cracked up at hipster land, and seeing Focci so absolutely in love is both adorable and hilarious. It's not like him, as Ellipse points out, but he clearly has found someone to crush on. Is it wrong that I was kind of hoping the cute siren you mentioned would be a he? Since Focci has two moms, I was expecting something similar here. In any case, Focci has a family in the future-set parts, so there's potentially more to siren biology than I know at the moment (presumably). Mostly, I'm curious to know why he has only the singular attraction. Is it just reasons exclusive to him, or is it more of a species thing (where members might have one target of attraction and are very strictly monogamous)? I've never actually had a crush on anyone, and the whole topic of romance is vaguely foreign to me, so I could just be hypothesizing a lot of nonsense. Still, it would be interesting to see the cute siren again (even if his name is fish-scale, which I find both funny and a fairly apt name for a siren), especially if he shows up at a completely random moment and Focci immediately loses his head in the clouds. That would be perfect, if inconvenient for everyone else. XD

The chapter itself intersperses, between the more comedic moments, plenty of great details. Tejal understand Ellipse's identity, but still respects her regardless - that's pretty sweet, while also demonstrating that Tejal isn't that naive. You also do a great job of throwing some drama at the end with the arrival of Maj's "friends." The specifus group appears infrequently enough in conversation that their arrival still turns out to be surprising, but isn't jarring. It took until right before the end for me to realize what Tejal keeps trying to talk about, and the "friends" approaching the Conics sufficiently alarmed me. Clearly, the specifus have figured out the pattern, and they're none too pleased. It seems like this will be the hardest of the three rescue missions, as the "friends" and other bounty hunters have plenty of evidence (Ellipse herself, the appearance of the Conics at all three locations, etc.) and no reason to hold back (thanks to the massive bounties that are likely involved). Thus, I'm curious to see how Ellipse handles this, and eager to see if the Conics crew can find the third specifus. All in all, great job!

Actually, wait, the first quote contains an error - I'm pretty sure it should be "on to", rather than "onto". Hope this helps!

We will discuss the sirens and their habits of attraction, yes. (Also I can't believe you remember that he has two moms. I thought it was subtle enough to be a surprise again later.)

And seriously, don't worry about not crushing on people. If you couldn't tell by Focci's reaction, it's not worth it.

Thanks again! I'll get to 10.2 once I push through all the end-of-year posts.



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— EllieMae