My Only Release

Hi, Lilly here to review your work. I really really loved your poem! It was well written (rare, for most of the poems I read), and I totally and completely agree with what you were saying. I also loved your inclusion of the line about cutting; it made it seem that much more real. One of my new favorite poems. Thank you!

~LJM368

Hello Rachel!!
i loved your poem, mostly because i totally understand and agree with you!!
its not music, its not art, but its always writing that can help let go of all emotions.
"my release doesn't come
from the scars on my wrists,
been there, done that.
its nothing to be missed"
I loved the way you've expressed this

Hey!

MarS here

So, Rachel, it was a very adorable piece. I like how it talks about the ultimate way to escape the harsh realities of the world, 'getting lost in the world of imaginations and letting them spill like a rill from the creaks in the rocks'. Wonderful!!

It's so relative to our lives, lives of us the Young Writers.
Dear, you're great. Because even though there weren't those surprising elements in there but it still went so well within my mind.

Good job.
** MarS
P.S. These asterisks(*) are the symbol of snowflake. As the winters have begun it's christmas on our minds.

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This is lovely!


I love your flow in this poem! It's very good and appeals!


My favorite stanza is

My release doesn't come
from the scars on my wrists,
'Been there, done that.'
It's nothing to be missed.

Hello there ^_^

So, in the first stanza:

Whatever it is... ,

and the feelings in my soul,

all need to be released;

Avoid repeating the word release here, also use a hyphen at the end instead of the semi colon and don't put the full-stop after:

they need to be let go.

nor melodies I've heard,

Hey there I like your poem so much. The topic was well represented in the piece,and it is something that everyone can relate to in one way or an othere. I can feel that you put a lot of effor and personalit in to this poem,and that is exactly what makes it so good!
Your poem truly great work. Keep on writing.I thank you for sharing

Hey you.
You continue to amaze me with how well you can write. And yes you're right, it is easy to relate to. It just flows so well, and kind of keeps the reader reading.

You've also described the feeling of frustration really well. Sometimes, nothing seems to work except writing. The relief doesn't seem to come. The frustrations continues to eat from within..

Well written. Again...

Harshita

My favorite is this, "Perhaps it's a tired hand
scrawling black ink on a page,
or stories I've kept to myself,
hiding my words, and keeping them safe.

Or maybe it's the late-night
tapping of keys.
Whatever it is...
It's my only release.


The thoughts in my head
and the feelings in my soul,
all need to be released;
they need to be let go.

No canvases I've painted,
nor melodies I've heard,
could ever compare
to expressing with words.

My release doesn't come
from the scars on my wrists,
'Been there, done that.'
It's nothing to be missed.

No, my release doesn't come
from things I say or I do.
My release only comes
when I write something new."

ALL of it.
It's well thought, the grammar is perfect, it just fits in together so well.
I couldn't see anything that seemed out of place.

I can relate to this, honestly.
Everything you put in, how you out it in, how it stays in, is just perfect.

I absolutely love the way you use your words.
They're odd, but yet so beautiful when put together.
You have an great talent, and I'm looking forward to reading more.
Keep up the good work!