This world is bitter.
Vicious; vexed; cold
Even so,
it is well with my soul.
The thunder rolls and the smoke is thick;
the leaping flames are all I see.
Though the fire is mighty fierce,
it is well with me.
The flames, they consume me,
and I draw my final breath.
"Save me, oh please!
Save me from my death."
The looming darkness is
destroyed by light.
In His blood,
I find new life.
Saved by grace,
my soul has been claimed;
there is no victory
for hell's hungry flames.
This world is poorly fated,
but this world is not my home.
Even so,
it is well with my soul.
Even so,
it is well with my soul.
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Hey!
Is this poem based on the old hymn "It is Well With My Soul" by Horacio G. Spafford? If so, this is my favorite hymn of all time.
I love the rewrite of the hymn almost as much though. It's got a lovely beat, and I can picture singing it to the same tune. The images and symbolism are spot on accurate and just really bring this piece to life. While there was no rhyme per say, it flowed lovely and I believe I caught a hint of assonance in this piece.
This is a lovely piece of writing! I hope to read more of your works soon!
Happy Review Day!
yubbies21
Yes, it is based loosely off of the hymn! Thank you
Hellooo.
Nice poem. The flow was consistent, and though there wasn't a set rhyme scheme, it worked well.
My favourite lines were :
"Saved by grace,
my soul has been claimed;
there is no victory
for hell's hungry flames."
I couldn't find any errors in punctuation or any typos, so it's fine.
Good Job!
Rating. 8/10
Hassan
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Hi,
First of all, I really like your poem, the imagery and the symbolism.The flow, in your poem, is very good and the meaning is clear. I do think though that it just has something missing. Maybe the descriptions could be a bit more powerful. I mean if you are describing hell, you could mention the scorching fire, forever burning and the wailing souls etc...Something that packs a bit more punch if that makes sense? But I did really like it, and I hope u=you keep writing because it was awesome
Hi, I'm warionack, and I'll be your reviewer for this evening/day/night and/or apocalypse (Still trying to figure out if my little intro is stupid or not... Eh, what'll you do?)
Let's get started.
First of all, I love this poem, but I do have some description issues. While I do realize that fire and shadow are very symbolic, I think you should tell us more about what they are, or what they represent, in poem of course. So while I did really like this poem and it's flow and whatnot, I have to admit I think it' cliche. Very brief and vague description of shadow and fire, and a telling of how this world isn't right for you, but you don't tell us why! Which you should, because I always love poems like this.
Despite my issues, I think you have a good poem here, and you're rhyming is good.
Good work!
I really like the way you have described the whole situation and I love the imagery.....nice piece of work.....very well explained.....keep on writing......