I think I got all of the syllable counts right... if you see an error, please point it out to me!
Mosaics consist only of shattered pieces and are beautiful.
What if my flawed heart, and all the broken pieces of me, could be too?
Wouldn't it be great to find out along the way that broken things heal?
That damaged souls can be stitched back together like they were never torn?
I pray my questions go unanswered no longer. Where is my healing?
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Oh my gosh. I'm speechless. The talent and skill which went into this just astounds me. Bravo!! I just loved the thought and intention behind this piece. Just so powerful and beautifully written. Please write more!
With Love and Admiration,
wallflower16
Hello.
This is a beautiful piece you've written.
The power and emotion behind these stanzas here:
So raw. I love it!
Also, great job on making the haiku style so smooth! Had you not mentioned it in the title, I probably wouldn't even have know it was a haiku.
That last line is perfect-- it rings and stands out.
Great job!
This whole thing is perfect. Keep writing, please!
I thought this was lovely. Instead of one haiku that is typically too short to have a lot of feeling, you put together five haikus and managed to give the reader more info. Typically, haiku talk about nature and natural things in the world, not typically stuff having to do with mankind. However, I thought this was perfect. Everything seemed natural because pain is a raw, natural emotion. I liked the first haiku best. I love the analogy with the mosaic and shattered pieces and your heart and how it is broken. I thought that was lovely and it provided a beautiful visual.
All in all, I loved this. It's unique and has a lot of feeling. I have zero nitpicks (which is petty rare), this poem is perfect, it's simple but beautiful. You convey pain in a poem that is very light and refreshing. Thank you for writing this, I think it's was amazing.
-Gravity
Crap! Sorry my computer malfunctioned and posted this twice for some reason. I didn't spam intentionally, sorry!
That's okay. Thanks so much for your review!
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Yeah, absolutely
This is really beautiful, you've put five haikus together into one giant haiku and it all flows smoothly. I don't usually find faults with personal and beautiful poems like this one, I always find the poems much more realistic and intimate and heart felt when they are written like this.
I love your ending line too, it really rings and stands out. Questioning the world and the readers.
Where is my healing?
Keep up the good work!
Thanks so much!