I've only been to a beach once, and even then it was a frightening experience altogether, so I'm technically underqualified to review this and completely understand. :/
positives
Now, I said I despise the beach as a whole, but beach-like themes are actually really interesting. Beaches are places where people can get together and hang out, which is a huge thing for numerous individuals who appreciate spending time with others.
There are endless possibilities for topics; the water, the fish bathing in the waters, the scorching sun, and countless more. From the title and intestines of this, you picked sand. Sand is quite complex, and when I say it's complex, I mean it's smaller than gravel and still very heavy.
adorable sand crabs
I'm a little bewildered about what a sand crab is? Is it merely a regular crab or something different? I'm getting off-topic though - I really enjoy how you describe them as adorable because it adds individuality and a lighter demeanor to the setting choices.
suggestions
Contrary to the popular opinion on this subject, "squishes, seeps, pushes" isn't doing it for me. It's essentially addressed to the first one in the sequence because squishing doesn't remind me of sand. It creates more of a chewy candy picture in my head.
The verb "seeps" also typically indicates something is leaking gradually through a penetrable material. In the rain, your clothes will get soaked because most clothing is made of permeable items; sand would not be considered that because it's grainy and rough.
"Pushes" could technically work, but pushing demands something provides a force that sand itself doesn't possess as an inanimate, lifeless object. Let's say someone is wandering around and that somehow pushes the sand, that works, but that sounds fraudulent.
And that's all I have to say here ~
Cheers again! <3
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