Ooh, my favourite time of the year ~
I agree with the statement about religion connecting to the solstice, and I believe it shows through in this whole stanza especially:
the sun goes out
at 4 o'clock
leaving humanity
in darkness
It's probably because of the part about "leaving humanity in darkness," which can be taken in the literal form and in the metaphorical form depending on the time and place. I think in historical celebrations of holidays being celebrated now always have this gap between olden days and right now - like evil-doings being associated with practitioners of Germanic and polytheistic religions, the witch trials sacrificing innocent women, etc etc.
The metaphorical darkness could be caused by a newfound fear, a general confusion about these kind of things, or something else entirely. It's a complex thing to capture in many words without a limit in place, and in poetry, it must be even harder.
the souls scream
from the pitch
"save us, save us!
the day of doom
is here."
If I'm being technical because I actually celebrate Yule (the celebration of the winter solstice) and so does my family, the solstice actually symbolizes the opposite of bringing doom to these souls; it is a sign that the sun has been reborn and so have the lost / vengeful / scared / *insert whatever negative adjective here* souls that have been lingering in the dark.
I do understand that the narrator is afraid for some reason and assumes the dark is equal to a day of doom-bringing, and that could be why they believe the souls feel the same way. It works for the atmosphere of a general anxiety about something unknown.
what caused this?
who thought this
was a good idea?
i ask the stars
I like this idea of talking to stars because it feels similar to they way scared people will attempt to seek answers and somehow make themselves feel worse. If the stars were to answer in a way where they give actual information as of why, it wouldn't change the narrator's thoughts because fear does weird things often.
The next stanza find of furthers that with the mention of "cold eyes" because it hints that they might think in similar ways about everything, too.
i watch the sun
the salvation
rising with a smile
we are saved
This is my favourite stanza - I especially like the last line because it shows a development of our narrator figure, and how their thoughts have changed because of the light. It also ties back to the religion, I believe, because good and evil is a long debated subject.
This is really wonderful ~
Cheers! <3
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