Hi, I know this story already has a lot of reviews but I just had to talk about it since I love scenes like this so much.
I won't mention the spelling or grammatical mistakes since they've already been addressed, but this does seem like the prologue or first chapter of an amazing story.
It seems like Luna is quite young, lives in a world where dragons are generally hated, and loves this little dragon a lot.
I wonder if she presented the egg to her parents thinking she could raise it or they found it when she didn't want them too.
I can already see the cute little dragon the moment you described it's head popping out of the shell.
The ending of the story kind of implied that she had been running away for quite some time. Who was chasing her? And is this just the most recent chase or a long ongoing crusade against her little dragon?
I love how your story sets up these questions and entices the reader to learn more about her and the little dragon she loves so much.
Even though this was a short story it really grabbed my attention and held it well. Good job overall
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