What is Depression?

Nice! I'm new here - this is literally the second work I'm seeing - so excuse my sloppy reviewing skills, please.
What I liked: "If I knew more, maybe it’d hurt more,
Maybe I’d break before I began"
That rings true, how knowledge is sometimes powerlessness. The letter B in "break before I began" is almost onomatopoeic, like the words are breaking over and over even as they are said. That "Maybe", though, is significant: this poem isn't entirely hopeless. I love how you've managed to convey the emotions without cheapening them, yet there's a very subtle hint that not everything is dark: "now, the colors fade to grey". That "now" suggests it wasn't always this way, so the colors could return, Everything "feels" hollow, but we know it's solid and that reality has
meaning.

Suggested improvements: None that I can think of. If I had to write something I'd replace "shine so bright" with "shine the brightest"... but that's just stylistic.

I really enjoyed this.

Relatable poem here.
I love it because I feel like it speaks my story

Relatable poem here.
I love it because I feel like it speaks my story

Relatable poem here.
I love it because I feel like it speaks my story

this poem is of: Good Content
It successfully: Gets Its Point Across
The emotional impact is: Successful
a point that could be improved upon is: The Use Of Quotations In The Poem.
A thing that is enjoyable is: The Use Of Color As A Metaphor.
The Empress states that:

"I liked this poem, it is short, but still enjoyable. I think that whoever wrote this must've had experience writing poetry before, particularly I liked the 'whatever you do it won't be enough...' stanza. It fits the feeling of helplessness/despair of the narrator."

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This captures a certain feeling of hollowness which is really exemplified in the regular structure which I think was good choice.

The regular rhyme, consistent line length and stanza length creates a sense inevitability. It pairs with the slow escalation of the depression (which is often how depression is).

You could branch out and try some differing imagery- I'm not sure as I mainly read poetry not write it.

overall, I think this captures and appeals to the experience of falling into depression and isolation. I appreciate this for voicing and spreading awareness to that.

Hello! I'm going to leave a quick review.

First off, thanks for sharing this work, which I presume is based on personal experience. It's always helpful when people help spread awareness.

I noticed this wasn't tagged or labeled as poetry, but it does take a poetic format. Then I noticed there is something of a rhyme scheme. Good job with keeping the consistent format of four lines per stanza. That gives everything a clean appearance and makes it easier to read.

With that being said, I'd encourage you to work on rhyming, as well as rhythm and meter. I find that a lot of people who write poetic stuff could use some work in this area, so don't feel like it's just you. I need to perfect this aspect of poetry myself! I frequently have to look up the difference between rhythm and meter in order to refresh my memory, and while my poetry doesn't always stick hard and fast to "perfect" or "proper" rhythm and meter, it is a very important part of poetry that really makes things flow.

The sentiments you expressed here are realistic. It's easy to wonder what could be different if situations were different. It's also easy to feel like everything is off and people don't understand.

In the next to last stanza, the third line says, "So why are you feeling so gone?"
In context of what is being expressed here, I think I basically get the point of what you're trying to say, but that line also doesn't exactly make sense. I can see that you probably worded it this way in order to accomplish the rhyme, but it just doesn't sound or feel like something someone would actually say. Or rather, it's not *how* someone would say it. It just feels unnatural. Maybe you could think about how to re-word it and still accomplish what you're trying to get across.

Once again, thanks for sharing this work. I think the last stanza pretty much sums up a lot of what people who struggle with depression feel - the way everything feels hollow, colorless, etc. I appreciate that you have put into words this vulnerable human experience. Keep writing!