Mom and Dad (together, like courtroom lawyers):
"Who's your favorite, beta? Tell the truth."
Me (sweating):
"Uhh... Dad?"
Mom (arms crossed, Oscar-worthy glare):
"I carried you for nine months. Broke my tailbone. Fed you mashed banana with my bare hands… and THIS is my reward?"
Me (panicking):
"Okay okay, Mom then!"
Dad (dramatic sigh):
"Wow. So now I’m just the guy who pays the WiFi bill. Cool cool."
Me (mentally):
Can I pick the dog instead? Or Should I say both
Random Aunty (popping out of thin air):
“Smart boy. Emotional type. Very diplomatic. He'll become a politician."
Me (handing over my marksheet):
"I got 95!"
Mom:
"My genes! Told you, I was a topper too."
Dad:
"Looks like my math brain kicked in! Must be those Sudoku puzzles I solved near your crib."
Me (feeling loved):
This is nice…
Cut to next exam...
Me (whispers):
"I got… 48."
Mom (turns slowly):
"Just like your dad. Always daydreaming."
Dad (disgusted):
"Exactly your mother’s side. Even her uncle failed twice!"
Me (emotionally bruised):
So my grades decide whose family I belong to?
Scene: I'm playing outside
Mom (from balcony):
"Why are you never home? Are we just ghosts to you?"
Dad:
"Don't come back with broken knees. You’re not Iron Man."
Next day: I sit inside watching cartoons
Mom:
"Stuck to this screen like a magnet! Go outside and make friends!"
Dad:
"Even the cat knows more people than you now."
Me:
So… inside = bad. Outside = also bad.
Conclusion: I should live on the balcony?
Me (calmly says “I don’t agree” once):
Mom: "Attitude alert! Teen virus detected!"
Dad: "At your age, I was earning money and buying vegetables!"
Next day, I stay quiet.
Mom (nervous):
"He’s depressed. He didn’t even ask for extra paratha."
Dad (on Google):
"Can silence be a sign of heartbreak in teens?"
Me (muffled):
I’m literally just tired and need a nap.
If I stay home during holidays:
Mom: "All you do is sleep, eat, repeat. Are you even enrolled?"
Dad: "Should I call your college and ask if you're still enrolled?"
If I go out with friends:
Mom: "He doesn’t even miss us. Not even a good morning text!"
Dad: "Comes home like a guest. Look who remembers the address."
Me:
So college is now a crime with no bail option?
I get my first job and start giving suggestions:
Mom: "You earn one salary and now you're the CEO of the house?"
Dad: "Don’t try to teach me. I used to change your diapers."
One lazy weekend later…
Mom: "He’ll never survive marriage."
Dad: "Start saving for his retirement now. He’ll live with us till 60."
Me:
Am I a child? Or grown up? Or tax-paying adult?
Still single at 25.
Mom: "I was married with two kids by now!"
Dad: "We’ll need a matchmaking app for parents at this rate."
Me (shows a girl I like):
Mom: "She better know how to make round rotis."
Dad: "What’s her blood group, job, family tree, shoe size?"
Me:
Why does it feel like I’m hiring a government employee, not falling in love?
I try to help:
Mom: "Look at him trying to parent me now!"
Dad: "He still doesn’t know how to fix a fuse, but sure, guide us."
I mess up one thing:
Mom: "He’s still my baby. Should’ve never let him move out."
Dad: "This is why I told you—he should’ve done engineering."
Me (screaming internally):
Am I 5 or 35? Please let me pick one.
Because in this comedy called life,
I’m the main character, but no one gave me a script.
Still, behind the overreactions, emotional blackmail, and unexpected lectures...
There’s a lot of loud, ridiculous, unconditional love.
But also… confusion. Lots of it.
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I was reading this in my history class, and I nearly cackled! This was so enjoyable and funny!
''"Who's your favorite, beta? Tell the truth."
Me (sweating):
"Uhh... Dad?"
Mom (arms crossed, Oscar-worthy glare):
"I carried you for nine months. Broke my tailbone. Fed you mashed banana with my bare hands… and THIS is my reward?"
Me (panicking):
"Okay okay, Mom then!"
Dad (dramatic sigh):
"Wow. So now I’m just the guy who pays the WiFi bill. Cool cool."
Me (mentally):
Can I pick the dog instead? Or Should I say both''
I mean, if dad pays the wifi bill.... I mean, I'm just saying!
''Random Aunty (popping out of thin air):
“Smart boy. Emotional type. Very diplomatic. He'll become a politician."
Random auntie popping out of thin air! WHATTTT?!
''Scene 3: Indoor vs. Outdoor Olympics
Scene: I'm playing outside
Mom (from balcony):
"Why are you never home? Are we just ghosts to you?"
Dad:
"Don't come back with broken knees. You’re not Iron Man."
Next day: I sit inside watching cartoons
Mom:
"Stuck to this screen like a magnet! Go outside and make friends!"
Dad:
"Even the cat knows more people than you now."
Me:
So… inside = bad. Outside = also bad.
Conclusion: I should live on the balcony?''
You know the balcony is actually a very cozy place. Here's what I don't get about parents. They want you to stay close to them, but then they want you to leave. LIKE MAKE UP YOUR MIND!
''If I go out with friends:
Mom: "He doesn’t even miss us. Not even a good morning text!"
Dad: "Comes home like a guest. Look who remembers the address."
Me:
So college is now a crime with no bail option?''
Okay, what the dad said was very funny!
Overall, I really enjoyed this!
Thank you lovely
Hi Alwaysea!
It was a nice work exploring the balance between absurdity and affection while raising a child. Definitely it's a comical portrayal of growing up in a lively and overbearing, but it also shows the portrait of a child- who grows into a young adult, caught in a constant pull and push of expectations and contradictions. I'm sure a lot of people would resonate with each of your scenes. In very few dialogues between the three MCs you conveyed each of the scenes just enough to make sure the reader is left reflecting on their own life experiences.
Throughout each scene, the child is confronted with difficult and quite emotionally impossible choices. And your ending notes capture the thoughts correctly given that these choices are always more difficult because that the kid is never affirmed as they are, only conditionally accepted based on performance (marks, behavior, obedience). That's what leads to confusion - 'What version of me do they want today?'
So overall your writing captures the hardship of growing up in environments where love is constant, but emotional clarity is not.
PS- I loved the cameo by Random Aunty xD
Thank you so much for the wonderful review
Oh my god, that was so fresh and relatable!! I honestly have no suggestions, you are too good at the thing that you are doing. The piece was short and snappy, telling us exactly what it needs to. And I have immense respect for artworks which achieve their goal.
Thank you so much wiz..your review made my day %uD83D%uDE03
This was a great read! I really enjoyed reading this and found it very relatable! I really enjoyed scene 2, 3, and 4! Those were the ones I found the most relatable. This made me have a good small chuckle.
Thank you so much
I love this! The way you set this up made it seem like reading a play script and the way you ended, still addressing it as if it was a play was amazing writing and use of language. The way you wrote this as well -- short and sweet sentences. The different scenes titles are also unique -- summarizing the scenes with unique and funny titles.
The scenes themselves are great as well. One thing happens, the parents say something, another thing happens, the parents say something totally different, and the writer ends the scene with a question.
I would suggest that you could make the scenes just a bit longer, maybe with a bit of overexaggeration or dramatic lines over small things to add more comedy. This is very good how it is though, and longer scenes might make this less comedic.
Just keep up with the good work! This is great writing and use of language, and I feel like you have some potential for writing!
Thank you so much for ur beautiful review...thought making them longer but somehow ended up doing one scene at each stage