Hey Tiny here!
I'm just here to point out your errors no big deal.
It's something we all know it. I would suggest changing this to a comma
But no one moves to change it.
It's a situation we know well its hard,
They are alone , no weapons no guard.
With A smoky sky , raining bombs
And most of all , broken hearts .
All this and we still like snails,
While they are going to jails.
Where are you people ?
Your hearts become like hard metal
Black as ash ,
No white flash .
I will space these outsend this Freedom call .
But please don't throw it to the wall .
So listen up,
I'm not gonna shut up,
I will keep writing,
until the truth ,
will light up their sky again … No need for these here
Just a few knit picky things. I overall enjoy this piece very much despite the few grammar errors
Keep writing
Points: 2
Reviews: 47
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