Woah. This was very cool. Nice job. Review for ya representing Red Writing Hood today!
First off, I really liked the rhythms and the structure you employed here. I feel like sometimes, hen people try to use a poems shape and structure to enhance I themes, it can easily start to distract from them and actually take away from the poem's central message. Here, you employed an interesting structure that both made sense aesthetically and complimented the thematic points very well.
My main concern, however, is that you bolded a ton of words here. I realize that you probably meant to emphasize those words and phrases, but holding too many words can negate these efforts. I thinks that's exactly what happened here. Maybe take another look at this and decide which parts of the poem you want to emphasize most and possibly tie then together. Then go back and rebold them over again. Other than that, I think you did a nice job here. The idea of exploring the whole process of a cat hair balling and then the owner having to clean up after it was interesting and you did a nice job turning a largely mundane thing into something charming and delightful. Nice job and I hope this helps.
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