Young Writers Society

I'm back. It's been a while since I reviewed something of yours, hasn't it?

This is a rhetorical question, of course.

But I'm not here for rhetorical questions, am I? And I did it again. I better get on to the review before this gets out of hand.

I can feel doom making it's way.

I don't think I remember.

Though I revised every single word

but my tomorrow my mind will be blank.

Knight Malachi here to review to keep blue team on this grand and glorious Review Day!!!!!
First off the beginning makes it sounds like something disastrous is bound to happen, so good job on that. Here is a typo I caught.

but my tomorrow my mind be blank.
It should be by instead of my, the first time.

I dont think I remember.
A single word I just learnt,
Though I revised every single word

Have had that feeling before for sure.

Some black insects I dont know.
I found that to be extremely creative, but also to make a ton of sense.

So I finished this with a smile on my face. The ending makes it sound so horrible, and yet you know it's only about a test, not the end of the world. Everything flowed smoothly, which is something that doesn't always happen easily. It was another free-verse poem that I enjoyed immensely. I have read a couple other short stories and poems about something to do with school, and i think this along with one called Math class, and How the color orange makes you feel, are some of the best. Good job.
Keep it up!
Happy Review Day!!!!

This was funny!

Hey, Umaima here to review your submission. First of all I have a question for you: How could you write this amazing poem a day before social exam? I mean that's just one amazing thing!

Now due to the lack of time this review isn't going to be a very long one.

I will start with correcting the formatting of you poem below:

"I can feel terror.

I can feel doom making it's way.

In a few hours it will be time.


Though it's long but we all know,

Time passes..It flies.

I dont think I remember.


A single word I just learnt,

Though I revised every single word

but my tomorrow my mind be blank.


I know that.. I will be staring

The answer sheet white,

the question paper filled with Some black insects I dont know.


I know I will. I forget things.

Things which carry marks.

I give no importance to this,

It will never help me.


The name of the designer of Garden City,

nor the hectic maths formula's

Never, It's never gonna.


Everything will be waste.

I can feel doom... Doom in hours,

With desperation down.


I should have learnt something,

'cause doom is making it's way."


Though the poem had a good error it formatting it was interesting enough to make me glued till the end!

There were punctuation problems but I fear I cannot nit pick them right now so I prefer you t re read the poem!

If you ever need help contact me, it's a 24 hour service with no guarantee XD

So keep it up!

Happy review day!

Umaima

I think this is hilarious!
In a way..
I like how this poem tells a story, about how you are up (possibly cramming) and worrying about this great big test you have. You make this test seem like the most important thing ever.
I saw a couple spelling mistakes, and a needed apostrophe.
thanks for the read,
herby

Hello! So this is a very interesting poem, I like it. The topic definitely intrigued me, and this is a cool spin on what you could do with the topic of impending doom. I found it to be a very serious poem, but I had to smile a little bit when I saw when you wrote it, I feel like that a lot of the time too, especially with AP Chem tests. But before I saw that, a couple things had confused me about the poem. For instance,

The name of the designer of Garden City,

nor the creator of printing presses.

Never.. It's never gonna.

hahahahahhahhaha I loved this one keep writing

All righty, time to review!!!

This line:
"Though it's long; but we all know,", why do you have a semi-colon? You could have used a comma. And the "but" is unnecessary, so I'd get rid of it.

"I dont think I remember./A single word I just learnt, " Again, the punctuation. Get rid of the period, replace it with a comma, and then change "learnt" to "learned".

"I know that.. I will be staring" last punctuation issue. Put the ellipses at the end of this line, not in the middle. It fits better with the effect you're going for.

I liked the contrast between the white answer sheet and the black insects. Nice job there.

Hope this helps!