A star stood above my window,
As I watched it for hours.
The sun set completely,
And night now took it's turn.
Everything the creator has created,
Has done it beautifully.
So think how heaven must be,
For only the true will enter.
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This is great. I love the way you say "So think how heaven must be" because that just sets me off thinking about what a heaven would look like. It has a great affect on me as a reader as it just sets off thoughts of how heaven must look as soon as I get to that line.
And "For only the true will enter" That just makes me think that only the people that deserve to go to heaven get there which makes me re think would I get in.
Really good short poem
Thanks Alot.
Hiya rbt! Happy Review Day!
I love your poem. I agree with the two reviews below me... It's so simple, but so perfect. I also agree with FatCowSis about the first line. That line is definitely my favorite line. I can imagine a brightly shining star 'standing' above the window.
There isn't anything that realy needs any critiquing. One suggestion/tip I have though is that the first letter in every line doesn't need to be capitalized. (It can be though, of you like it that way). I prefer a fully lower case line at least a couple times in a poem, just because it's easy on my eyes. I don't know... I like the way it looks, haha. Just my opinion, though.
Well, thanks for the nice, quick read. Keep writing and again, Happy Review Day!
Yours till the Chocolate Chips,
Snow
HAHA THANKS
I love the poem! Happy review day, Molly here to review. The poem is short and sweet. It has a great message and I love the cute details you added. It seems to be pure and very in depth. I found the poem title intriguing and I definitely look forward to reading more works of yours! Happy review day and keep writing!
THANK U SO MUCH:)
Hey rbt00,
Ummmm, wow. Great poem! It's beautiful, yet so true!
I love the personification of having the star "stand above your window".
Both grammar and spelling are fine. I really can't find anything wrong.
Overall, this is a beautiful piece of poetry! Cant wait to read more from you! I love how you added the aspect of heaven and a little religious taste! Happy review day!
-FCS
Thanks a ton!
Same 2 u.