Hey there indie, you only received one review form your Secret Santa during Christmas in July, and so I'm here to give you your second review!
I'm going to warn you in advance that poetry reviews sure aren't my forte, but you haven't posted any prose in a while so I didn't really want to review something old. As a result, here I am! I just can't make any promises that I'll be very useful. But anyways, I actually really loved this. You use a lot of subtlety, and I like that. You don't tell us that the person the narrator is speaking about is dead (or something like that, I'm guessing), but you hint at it in the way you write. I think subtlety is especially effective in poetry because it makes the whole thing feel more... magical, and so I really do like this.
I don't really have any critiques to be honest, ummm... I guess the only thing I have is a suggestion. As it stands, this poem is very simple and the subject of it is very specific, and you don't really explore all that much. What I'm trying to say is that you focus entirely on how the person being discussed in this poem is gone/dead, and that's about it. Your narrator talks about the person being gone, but he/she doesn't actually talk about the person themselves. I've no idea if I'm making sense here and I fear that I may not be, but do you sort of see what I'm trying to say? I just think I'd like to see a bit more of the person your narrator's talking about here, and understand why your narrator has been so affected by their death/disappearance.
Now I'm not saying I want a detailed description about the person, from their shoe size to what they ate for their last breakfast, but I want to feel like I know them in a sense. That way, I think the impact of their death/disappearance will be far greater because we as readers feel connected to them in a sense. For example, you say how the person's lungs are now just stone, right? What were they like before they were stone? (metaphorically of course, I know their lungs aren't actually stone now.) Were they strong and powerful, and breathed bountiful life into this person? That's obviously a really bad example, but do you see the kind of thing I mean? Bring the person in your poem to life. That way, their death/disappearance will have much greater impact.
Other than that, I don't really have anything to suggest or critique. I honestly did really enjoy this poem, and as I said earlier, I adore the subtlety of it. It's really pretty. I know I've been really useless with this review, so I do apologise for that, but I hope my one suggestion is at least a little bit useful. But yus, anyways, if you have any questions or comments regarding this review now that I'm done, just let me know. I'll try and get back to you as soon as possible. Sorry again for giving you such a shabby review!
Keep writing,
xoxo Skins
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