Young Writers Society

Hey there, wordsandwishes here to review.^^

I have to say I really love the meaning of this peace, the way you show giving in as a form of freedom. It's unique, and I like it. The voice in this piece is also very well done, the reader can clearly picture in their someone questioning what they live for.

Your grammar, punctuation, layout, and all that nitpicky convention stuff is all good. I can't really find much to criticize here, I really liked your rhyme scheme too, it's nice and subtle and natural; It doesn't sound forced or out of place.

Overall, a good, solid piece of poetry.

My favourite stanza:

I wonder why I put up with this
and not let myself be slain.
Should life be truly left as it is
when there’s nothing worth the pain?

Sorry, I can't say anything yet because I'm still new.

Hello there here is a me with a review I hope that this helps you.

OK here you are a bit discordant see

There are times I want to run away
leaving everything behind.
For once hoping to be led astray
from those that constrict and bind.

Wanting to be intoxicated
isn’t something I regret.