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Ah, so personal. I like it!
" You scoundrell, you witch,
you lying little bitch.
Curse your wicked bloodline
you evil daughter of malign."
This one was the best. Every little word seems embedded with hate and venom. I don't know if I got the message of these lyrics, but I sure as hell got the tone, so you can pat yourself on the back for this.
Oh, and ignore the criticism like "rhyme pattern is a little bit incomplete". It's poetry, not rocket science. Nothing is set in stone and everything is free, as per the writer's own liking.
That was a very sadistic poem. And hateful, and vindictive, and shocking. I like how the narrator sounds very accusing and angry. You nailed that. Although, the ryhme pattern is a little bit incomplete. I think you oughtta play around with it a little.