Hi!
Let me start off by saying this poem is really lovely. Your language choices are superb and colorful, although there are some things you need to work on.
For one, you have a bit of an issue with subject-verb agreement. The subjects you are talking about have the wrong verb associated with them. Like "When dreams caressing" should be "When dreams caress" and "the beauty and the excellence that gladdens" should be "the beauty and the excellence that gladden."
I am also not sure what "Highlights of the moonlight" is supposed to mean and it feels out of place in this poem.
However, the speaker of this poem is pretty well established. As a reader, the speaker is highly relatable.
Your writing is very nice like when you read it out loud, it sounds well. Although I do have an issue with the pause after every line. It disrupts the flow of your poem and I think you should reconsider changing that.
Overall, it's a great poem even though it does need some work.
Keep writing and good luck,
Dianne E.C.E.
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