Young Writers Society

Very short review you will get from me now because I basicly do not have many things to tell you (complain i mean) so this won't be any long.
I like tittle even if it confused me at first.It caught my eye even if i was kind of unsecure will that worth the read but this a question I usually (most of the time) ask myself because I am really picky about poems/poetries but this one is worth it, I could say and you did your job very well.
I have to admit that some lines did not make any sense for me and felt not right and connected at all but I think the other reviewers had already told you that so I won't be the person to repeat this all over again after you know it already.This is poetic and in the style I like.
You have rhymed it all good and it did not feel forced at all (atleast in my opinion?)
That is all I could say.Maybe you should reread it and see if you will correct something but overall, good job and keep on writing.
I think people who write poetry/poems and go with the rhyme smoothly are brilliant.

Hi!
WARNING: I'M NOT AS GOOD AS YOUR PREVIOUS REVIEWERS SO THIS IS PROBABLY GONNA SUCK!
First your theme is super awesome. Realky it would be damn fun to live in a world like that, where everything was upside-down!
You have got an awesome flow but a couple of lines did'nt make sense to me like...
"If happy people laughed all day and the sad just wore a frown." Whats up-side down in this, happy people always laugh and sad people always were a frown....
I guess thats all i've got for you...

Never quit writing
Fangirl~

Hey! Just a quick review!

I really liked this poem and I just really loved the idea. The rhyming was great and didn't feel forced at all. The last line of the poem was really deep and hit me hard because it's so true. Really poetic and just great!

My only thing that I felt you could improve was the way you formatted the poem. Look at this lovely article and it tells you how to format your poem: How to Format Poetry Even though you don't have to make your poem look like this. I would recommend it because it makes your work look neater.

Here is the basic steps:
1) go to edit your poem
2) click the button that looks like <p> (I think it looks something like that)
3) paste

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Hi there, nice to meet you. This poem is very fun and I could definitely see it in a book of children's poems or even on the wall at a library with some goofy illustrations- very nice. There are a few lines which could be polished so let's take a closer look:

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Water shines on the sun as it glimmers in the light,

Wrestlers on their yoga mats whilst Buddhists start to fight.

People laugh at funerals but crying is for the wedding,

The cleaner's at the spa whilst the owner does the bedding.