Hello tick,
welcome to the site, hopefully you've been enjoying. I can see you've already got some awesome reviews which I'm sure was helpful for you. So, i won't talk much! XD
I think i should say that, I totally loved your poem. The way you described the whole thing, i can picture of the corporate world, but not much of the political world. So, that's something, in my opinion, you're lacking in, as i don't have any idea of which country you're talking about. But, the political situation of my place is definitely more awkward. If you want to imagine it, feel free to think of the hunger games or can i just suggest the Tom and Jerry show? I'm not kidding though!
What i loved most about your poem is the very last line! That no one remembers to turn the lights on, which I believe where you wanted to say about the change, the change for good. That, at the end of the day, at the end of the fiscal year, we can barely see the change. But, one can't bring change alone. We must stay united for that!
Very good work anyway! Have a great day!
~Nire
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