Young Writers Society

Hello, I am xxv0nillaWriterxx here to review you AWESOME poem So your poem is a flow but add emotions and feelings about the character so the reader can understand it more. Also describe the setting, what setting is it take place, it will help the reader vision the poem better. I like the way it rhyme sometimes in each stanzas and nice organization. Love your poem just add the things i say if you want, i am not forcing you, it is your poem! Thanks for reading this review and HAPPY WRITING!

Hello, it's Artemis28! I'm here for a review, obviously.

I like the idea of this poem. Good imagery, talking about the glowing lights and the trees. Nice job on that.

I'm a little confused, though, on who these people are. Are they witches? Regular old people who just dance and sing? Something else? Who knows? I'm wondering if you hid this away from your readers intentionally, but if you didn't mean to, I suggest that you make it clearer in your poem.

The ending was really witty, and I like that. And how these people say they're performing magic and they're proud of it, and if you don't like it they don't really care. Your poem's cool; the rhyming helps the fun little feel the poem gives off. Good job and keep writing!

XOX,
Artemis28

Yo. This is an interesting poem. I do believe that you meant to say "trees" in the third line and not "tress." Also, you need to make the words have rhyme in the stanzas. Besides that, you did a very awesome job at writing this poem. I like how you are being unique and it's the typical poem. This is the first poem that I've read of yours and I would like to read more from you. You seem to have potential in what you write. I like to see that. Thanks for putting your work out. Keep up the work.

From A Fellow Writer 1998

Hey! Cello here!

Interesting story. it was very creative and you had some beautiful rhymes though I'm not quite sure what to make of the ending. I won't be editing content though so I'll leave that to the next reviewer.

Let's talk about beat! The lines that rhyme/contain the rhyming words should be within 1 to 2 syllables of each other. (The less difference the better)

The first stanza? Great! Perfect on the syllables! Second stanza? One syllable off but it fits in the guide lines. Third stanza? It's technically fine but...

For those lucky guests,

Who see our display,

They never leave the forest,

In exactly the same way.

So we usually save it

We're not really witches,

Though people call us so,

We just like to entertain,

With our little magic show.