Hey there! Uni here for a review.
How are you doing? Hope you are fine.
Sorry for not reviewing this earlier!
I'm so excited to be back and start reviewing your poem! Hope you're doing well today or tonight, depending on what side of the world you're on.
Not a very long poem but deep emotions, I must say. I can relate to the poem very well. And I know most of us can relate to the words and feelings you have put in this literary work.
So let us start.
First of all, I have to say you are an amazing poet. Each word struck just the right cord in my heart. I have felt the feelings you have described so beautifully. And I loved the way you presented them. Ten stars for presentation.
Making a poem rhyme at the same time saying everything you want to say is a bit difficult. But not impossible.
Great rhyming scheme, I must say.
'Enough time had gone by,
that I had slowly forgotten the part of you to me that had died.
I'm glad I saw you from behind,
so your eyes didn't have the chance to make me go blind. '
I liked these lines because they have such a beautiful meaning. Easily relatable lines. You write so amazingly that I can actually feel it is happening with me, which at this time, is not.
'I have to admit,
that I held my wit.'
I liked the expression in the above mentioned lines. Such short sentences but I could feel the emotions.
'It might have not been easy for me to have walked away,
that day.'
Here, maybe you can fix the sentences a little bit. Just an advice. Again, That's me. You do whatever you like.
Also, make the first letters bold and overall polish and re-edit the poem. That would be enough.
I liked the theme. And I hope you'll post more of your poems.
Have a good day. Keep writing.
Points: 25
Reviews: 6
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