There's all types of love and relationships,
each one different from the next.
My favorite would have to be the one shared between you and me,
a forbidden love as you shall see.
I never would have thought or believed,
that I would have fallen for someone like you.
Growing up you never know,
you try to be like all the others.
Then soon it seems harder,
as the years go by.
I met you one day and I will never forget it.
Since then we have been inseperable,
and I wonder what this means.
Someone like you,
and someone like me?
Forbidden to be.
I want to know just what I feel,
but my heart will not let me know.
So know I wait for it to tell me,
if this forbidden love is what I really want.
not what I expected because the title forbidden love I thought it would be about something forbidden you to find that love. any way a great start to what I think is better written as a story because you add mre contextual detail and more tension and you can add even more to how the narrartor is feeling because you don't have to stick to a tone or a rhyme scheme. I felt your passion and your words jumoed of the page into my heart. so well done
8 /10 keep writing and keep seekingthetruth
Hello,
This poem has a nicely developed idea of forbidden love... this topic actually reminds me of Romeo and Juliet which we just finished reading in school! There are many different types of loves, and I like how you talked about forbidden love because it can be "forbidden" for many reasons. This lets my thoughts run through all the possibilities! These are what I liked about the poem... now on to what can be adjusted.
Growing up you never know,
you try to be like all the others.
Then soon it seems harder,
as the years go by.
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