I love the sense of yearning that you express in this poem. You do a great job of representing that desire to both seek out a mother's love without letting her see how much her little girl has changed; this is a strong emotion that makes for a strong theme within poetry as a whole.
I'm a big fan of rhyme schemes, so I enjoyed the ABABAB pattern you employed. The only critique/comment I have is to perhaps shorten that one longer line ("The innocent little girl who didn't know what was to come") if only for the sake of formatting/maintaining a consistent structure, but this is just a personal preference. Aside from that, lovely poem, and keep writing!
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