The hurt,
its there.
It sticks into the tiny cracks,
like glue holding together what was once so broken.
The memories,
are glazed over.
Hidden far back in the mind,
so that they can't be repeated over again.
The feelings,
that cut deep.
They are still hidden in the skin,
and the scrubbing, does nothing to make me feel whole again.
Heyyy, I'm here with a review! I loved this poem. You truly conveyed the feeling of hopelessness. I really liked the shortness of the poem, it gave you a punch after reading it. It gave you something to remember.
The metaphors you used were actually amazing, and this is definitely a starstruck poem. I can't really think of any critique for this poem, which is unusual. This gets five stars in my book!
I don't have much else to say, sorry. As always, keep writing!
-Daria
Hello, FlamingPhoenix here with a short review for you on this lovely night, and to help get your work out the green room.
Okay let's begin with the review!
So I really liked this poem, and what it as about, but a few of the lines in here were a little long. So here is one that can be shortened.
like glue holding together what was once so broken.
Hiii Brookelo! Your piece of work is really nice. The sentences and the words used are very deep. It is one of those masterpiece, which you can feel while reading. I could experience that emotion when I am hurt, through this. It's really amazing. But I think that the sentence length should have matched, it would just make it a bit more good.
It is fantastic. Keep going with the good work!
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