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I definitely liked this poem. It was complete, it followed your meter, it had a tangible story line and the rhymes worked well and held together thematically. A lot of times the hardest part of rhyming poetry is finding words that fit the meter and the theme, and you did that here. I would experiment a little more with slant rhyme, some of the best can be found in Emily Dickinson's work. Keep it up.
Thers
Amy!
So you've been bitten by the rhyming bug, eh? Well, you've been bitten good! I'm liking this structure a lot as well.
I would suggest adding ';' after insults.
So great job again! And here's to more good rhyming poems from you!
Murtuza