Regurgitation of My Paradoxes

I liked the twist at the end of how you put the lines together in an order that changed the meaning completely. However, you could work a bit on the start of it, just to make it make a bit more sense. If I could say anything, It would be to expand a bit, maybe deepen the vocabulary and visual images (you have none right this second). I really liked it, but I had trouble understanding it. Remember that you're writing something for others to understand, so make sure it will make sense as much outside of your head as it does on the inside of your head.


I don’t know who I am.

They think they know me,
People whisper I’m stupid.

I am intelligent,
That’s why my friends secretly hate me,
I will never amount to anything.

I am talented,
Though a coward at all the wrong times.

I am fearless,
You won’t let me see the real you.

I envy the person you are,
But love my exterior.

I hate myself to the core,
Maybe I just care too much.

I don’t care.


I loved this part You did a really good job! Don't stop writing .

Hi there amygabb.

Bahaha... Okay, this poem is not supossed to be funny, I know. But I love that you added sarcasm to it, since almost every teenager speak that language aaaaaall around the world. Now, you said... "People whisper I'm stupid" twice the exact same way, and I kind of dislike that. Add more beauty, be creative, find other ways to say the same thing. That'd make it more enjoyable. But I definitely like it a lot, no doubt. And I seriously love the "I am fearless" line. <3

That's all. Keep Writing!

~Solly<3