Life Cycle Of A Helium Balloon

by amygabb

Published October 27, 2011

In Poetry

Life Cycle Of A Helium Balloon


Look at them:
resilient and lighter than air
a tail of ribbons fashioned into helices

They push at the ceiling
optimistically bobbing
attempting to escape into space

However they have little endurance
so in a day or two
they surrender to gravity
and wallow on the floor

Their death is slow
but painless
deflating until they slump
shriveled and wrinkled on the ground

Although if I were a helium balloon
I would prefer the other way to go
I think that I would
like to go out with a bang

Comments & reviews · 3
StitchesThePuppet wrote a review Review · Nov 23, 2011

I like this poem-- it is an interesting way to describe an ordinary object.
I mean, not just anyone looks at a balloon and thinks, "Hey, what an interesting balloon. I think I'll write about it." Your poem is surprisingly interesting.
Also, the last verse--

Although if I were a helium balloon
I would prefer the other way to go
I think that I would
like to go out with a bang

Love it. Good job!

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youngwolf1105
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youngwolf1105 wrote a review Review · Nov 23, 2011

I like it! I do believe that you're the next peot laureate! The things you write on a whim amaze me. Like your creativity, your grammer, everythig really. You're so fun with you're poems, you're limitless. it so great to watcha young writer grow as a poet.

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davantageous
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davantageous wrote a review Review · Oct 27, 2011

Look at them:
resilient and lighter than air
a tail of ribbons fashioned into helices
Good beginning.
They push at the ceiling
optimistically bobbing;
attempting to escape into space.

However[color=#FF0000], they have little endurance
so in a day or two
they surrender to gravity
and sulkily sink on the floor
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Their death is slow,
but painless;
deflating, until they slump
shriveled and wrinkled on the ground

Although if I were a helium balloon,
I would prefer the other way to go
I think I would like
to go out with a bang
Great ending just a comma and moved like up to the third line.



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