Hey, WindSailor! It's ScytheMeister here for a quick review
First of all, I will comment on what I liked. I liked the concept, I'm not a devout believer, however I do accept the many beliefs that walk this earth and have debated the complexity and realism of most. What I loved about this was the emotion behind it. It did not tap into the complexity and force its words unto the reader (which I have sometimes found with certain [minority amounts] of religious works) but rather, it showed the emotion of this believer. It wasn't just directed towards religious groups. I think it could be interpreted beautifully by everyone and I think no matter what our background, no matter what we believe, we always have this doubt: Why me? Why us? Why are we the "chosen ones" essentially... Why do we deserve to survive?
However, there was the time in the poem in which Christ gave reassurance and guidance for the believer, which I found utterly beautiful. It shown a real connection between man and belief and it was heart-warming. Good Job!
I failed to find any real grammar mistakes. If there were and I haven't picked up on it, I apologise.
The layout though, is much different from most poems. I would have been nitpicky and disagreed with it but I actually found that it matched the contents of the poem quite well.
Good Job, I hope to read more like this
Keep Writing! <3
- ScytheMeister
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