Before A Giant I Stand

Hi Weather here to review.

I really enjoyed reading this, it was very insightful and had a strong, clear message. I interpret this, from a religious view that it could be about life's troubles making a person feel small, defenseless and weak in comparison to them. But with God's interference they feel invincible over any situation thrown at them. For some reason this reminds me of when the stone was rolled away after the resurrection, like the stone which was a hindrance to progress once taken away was success revealed.

Anyways enough of my babbling, onto the review!
You have some comma misplacement's in this and slight punctuation errors.

Before a giant I stand
"In comparison, just a grain of sand.
He towers over me, with might and power,
Constantly screaming his lies, louder and louder.
Seemingly hopeless, I wallow in defeat

You have a typo in writing a quotation mark in front of the word, "In" on your second line.
There is a bit of a comma misplacement after the word, "over me" it doesn't quite fit.

"I will win this battle, not by might, but through faith"

Slight comma misplacement here again, after the word "battle", a comma is not needed.

Overall nice piece, keep writing it was encouraging! Hope I helped.

--Weather

This is a fantastic poem! I absolutely loved it.
I'm a Christian myself, so this really speaks to me.
God can be a little scary, I mean, this guy died on a cross and rose again. That's different.
But this guy, who is actually not a guy, came here to save us. So, if you remember that, he isn't very scary. Some non-believer's I have known were just scared if they accepted him, then messed up he would condemn them to hell. But that isn't how God works. -Stops rambling-

Okay, but this Giant is coming over you like a skyscraper, and I like how you bring up in the moment of your fear that God was right there. Awesome, and true. If God is for us, then who can be against us? No Giant, indeed!

This also makes me think of Goliath. How he got taken down just by a little stone.
Faith does alot in our time's of fear. He trusted God to help him, and God always listens.
The soldier's didn't have faith, so they would have surely died because they didn't trust that God was stronger.

-Rambling done-


But GREAT job! I sincerely love it, and hope you keep putting pieces up like this. It encouraged me that even though things seem bad, they arn't because I have God. Good luck on your next pieces of work!

Ineed! God is powerful and He can let us face the true, sometimes we need help and then we can ask Him for help. But the only rule is that you must keep faith, hope and trust.

We must see the good in the wrong and the light in darkness. Even when everything feels wrong we don't give up and God shows us the way. Sometimes if we don't belive or have faith, God can let us show how strong we are.

Now I go comment on your poem, it was really strong and I love the rythm and flow of this one. Also I love rhyming poetry and it rhymes!

You are a great writer and don't throw your talent away,

Dazzle

First of all, thank God! God knows I needed this. Given the fact that the the earlier review focused on the grammar and structure of the poem, I would like to focus on the theme.

The poet persona inadvertently exhibited a spiritual trait: humility. There is an atmosphere in the poem that suggests that he glories in is weakness and understands his limitation. However, this is only possible because of his belief. Right now, God knows I really needed that. To understand that regardless of the depth of our weaknesses there is freedom if we just cast our burden on him. Thank you for this. To be a writer with faith is like going up a hill in today's world. Thanks again!

Hey there, Rhia here to review.

As I am not religious at all, I am going to review this solely from a perspective of grammar and wording, as I am in no position to decide anything about the content.

Okay, first off. Rhyming.
-The fact that your poem rhymes automatically is going to draw some people towards it, and push others away. I am one who tends to dislike rhyming, or, more so, the idea that poems need to rhyme. The few times that I've made poems that rhyme, the first draft did not rhyme at all. I find that, if I go into a poem wanting to rhyme, I focus more on the rhyming then the actual poem. That's just something to think about, because there are several lines here where I could tell that the wording was awkward because you were accommodating for a pre-chosen, rhyming word.
- You have fallen prey to some of the cliché rhyme pairs here; fight and light, I and die. It just gives it a tired, worn out feeling when one reads it. Those are words that are expected.
- If you're going to rhyme, you should stick with the rhyme scheme. The first and last stanzas have an aabbc scheme, then the middle one has an abbcc. It just throws the whole thing out of whack, if you ask me.
- Slant rhyme- As opposed to the cliché rhymes I pointed out earlier, these are awesome! You should try to employ more slant rhymes than straight up rhymes. It adds intrigue, the slight difference pulls the reader in. Great job.

" In comparison as a grain of sand. "

This just felt a little awkwardly worded. It isn't implying the meaning it should. Perhaps try a change to something like, "In comparison, just a grain of sand"?

"Some say this is how it is just meant to be"
Same with this one, it just feels awkward read aloud. Maybe "Some say this is just how it is meant to be"? It just flows a little better, I think.

I hope I wasn't too harsh, and I hope my feedback is found helpful